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進(jìn)來(lái)中國(guó)人都在說(shuō)中國(guó)夢(mèng)，假如你是一個(gè)無(wú)錫中學(xué)生，你叫Gao Fei, 來(lái)自湖北，目睹了無(wú)錫最近幾年的發(fā)展和變化，有喜有憂(yōu)。于是你給政府有關(guān)部門(mén)發(fā)了一份e-mail，說(shuō)說(shuō)自己對(duì)未來(lái)的一些夢(mèng)想，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：
1. 最近幾年無(wú)錫發(fā)展很快；比如，道路變寬了；城里可供人們休閑的場(chǎng)所也多了；這里的人們過(guò)著幸福的生活；
2. 但是還存在一些嚴(yán)重的問(wèn)題：房?jī)r(jià)太高，許多人根本買(mǎi)不起房子；因?yàn)楣�業(yè)的發(fā)展，水和空氣被嚴(yán)重污染；人們很難呼吸到新鮮空氣。
我的夢(mèng)想：……
注意1.短文須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，要求語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫；
2. 第3要點(diǎn)作2-3句話(huà)的適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
3. E-mail的開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
4. 詞數(shù)：80個(gè)詞左右。
Dear Sir or Madam,
How are you? It’s my great pleasure to write this e-mail to you. Recently，people in China have been talking about Chinese Dream. I also have my own dream and Iwould like to share it with others.
My name is Gao Fei. I’m a middle school student. I moved to Wuxi with my parents five years ago because my parents found work here.
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Yours sincerely,
Gao Fei

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam,
How are you? It’s my great pleasure to write this e-mail to you. Recently，people in China have been talking about Chinese Dream. I also have my own dream and I like to share it with others.
My name is Gao Fei. I’m a middle school student. I moved to Wuxi with my parents five years ago because my parents found work here.
Wuxi has developed quickly in the last few years. For example, the roads become wide. There are many places for people to relax. The people here are living a happy life.
     But there are still some problems. The prices of the houses are too high. Many people can’t afford to buy them at all. Water and air are badly polluted. It is difficult for people to breathe fresh air.
     My dream is that people in Wuxi can enjoy clearer blue sky , more beautifule Taihu lake and that every family can own a nice comfortable home in the future .
Yours sincerely,
Gao Fei

解析試題分析：這是一篇提綱類(lèi)作文，要求寫(xiě)一篇介紹夢(mèng)想的短文。本題給出的材料較為簡(jiǎn)略，動(dòng)筆前應(yīng)先認(rèn)真閱讀材料，圍繞所給材料組織內(nèi)容，確定主要短語(yǔ)，句式等問(wèn)題。通過(guò)閱讀材料可知這篇短文主要使用的人稱(chēng)就是第一人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，這方面需要注意的問(wèn)題比較少。動(dòng)筆前可以按照材料內(nèi)容列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，寫(xiě)出關(guān)鍵單詞。寫(xiě)作中注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系。上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞。
考點(diǎn)：提綱類(lèi)作文
點(diǎn)評(píng)：做英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)時(shí)，要注意認(rèn)真審題，分析體裁，確定時(shí)態(tài)；分析內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，列出一些基本詞匯及詞組；注意表達(dá)的條理性，用好連接詞。最后，注意不要犯語(yǔ)法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫(xiě)好后多讀多修改，我想一定會(huì)寫(xiě)出滿(mǎn)意的文章來(lái)。