Question

11．根據(jù)要求完成小作文，詞數(shù)：30-40詞左右．
在你的成長過程中，家人和老師傾注了大量的心血．他們對你的生活和學(xué)習(xí)除了給予關(guān)心，幫助之外，也會給你提出一些建議．請你根據(jù)自己的情況，列舉他們給你的關(guān)心，幫助和建議．My parents are very kind and helpful．They cook meals and wash clothes for me every day． At the weekend，they often prepare some of my favorite food．Sometimes they also help me with my lessons．They are very strict with me．but when I make a mistake，they first listen to me and then have a talk with me instead of complaining about it．They always try to understand me．I think it is a good way for a child to grow up．With their care，I am living and studying happily．．

Answer 1

分析 動筆前應(yīng)先認(rèn)真閱讀材料，圍繞所給材料組織內(nèi)容，確定主要短語，句式等問題．題中包含了這些要點(diǎn)：①家人和老師你的生活和學(xué)習(xí)的關(guān)心；②給你的幫助和建議．注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，句子要通順連貫，沒有語法錯誤．
高分句型一
they first listen to me and then have a talk with me instead of  complaining about it他們先聽我說，然后跟我談，而不是抱怨．instead of  而不是，注意后面應(yīng)該用動名詞．
高分句型二
I think it  is a good way for a child to grow up我認(rèn)為這是孩子成長的好方法．這是一個賓語從句，I think是主句，it  is a good way for a child to grow up是從句．

解答 My parents are very kind and helpful．They cook meals and wash clothes for me every day． At the weekend，they often prepare some of my favorite food．【要點(diǎn)一，家人對你的生活和學(xué)習(xí)的關(guān)心】Sometimes they also help me with my lessons．They are very strict with me．but when I make a mistake，they first listen to me and then have a talk with me instead of  complaining about it【高分句型一，注意 instead of  的使用】．They always try to understand me．I think it  is a good way for a child to grow up【高分句型二，注意 賓語從句的使用】．With their care，I am living and studying happily．【要點(diǎn)二，給你的幫助和建議】

點(diǎn)評 本篇寫作需注意要求中所提供的要點(diǎn)，不可遺漏．需在平時積累相關(guān)的詞匯，多閱讀此類題材，將詞匯歸類整理；動筆前可以按照材料內(nèi)容列出簡單提綱，寫出關(guān)鍵單詞．寫作中注意語義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系．