Question

假如你是紅星中學(xué)的李華，收到來自英國學(xué)生Mark的電子郵件，咨詢你校暑期為異國學(xué)生舉辦漢語夏令營活動，請通過電子郵件向Mark介紹本次活動，其內(nèi)容如下：
1. 活動時間：7月10日到7月30日；地點(diǎn): 紅星中學(xué)。
2. 活動內(nèi)容：
·學(xué)習(xí)日常漢語，可與當(dāng)?shù)厝私涣鳌?br />·舉辦各種晚會，了解中國歷史和中國傳統(tǒng)文化，例如節(jié)日……
· 參觀博物館，長城等……
3. 活動意義……
注意：
1. 詞數(shù)不少于100；
2. 可適當(dāng)?shù)募尤爰?xì)節(jié)，以使內(nèi)容充實(shí)，行文連貫；
3. 開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Mark,
I feel delighted to get your email,___________________________________________
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Yours ,Lihua

Answer 1

Dear Mark,
I feel delighted to get your email, knowing you are so interested in the Chinese Summer Camp to be held in our school from July 10th to July 30th this summer. The content of this Chinese Summer Camp is as follows:
Firstly you will learn everyday Chinese by communicating with Chinese students so that you can speak simple Chinese with local people. At the same time you will be taught Chinese  with the help of teachers ,understanding the meaning of Chinese characters.
Secondly you will take part in different parties, knowing the history of China and Chinese culture , especially Chinese holidays, which will impress you deeply.
What’s more, you will have chances to visit some museums and tour the Great Wall, experiencing the colorful culture of China and the greatness of the Great Wall.
I believe the Chinese Summer Camp will not only provide the chance for you to study Chinese , but also will promote friendship between us.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達(dá)，文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來了，但是不是很具體，考生要把要點(diǎn)解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。除了表達(dá)這些要點(diǎn)以外，還要適當(dāng)拓展，使內(nèi)容充實(shí)，這就要求考生自己拓展發(fā)揮，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】所給范文語言簡潔，運(yùn)用了好的詞組和句子：as follows 如下，with the help of 在…的幫助下，not only… but also …不但，而且， I feel delighted to get your email, knowing you are so interested in the Chinese Summer Camp to be held in our school from July 10th to July 30th this summer. 這用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語， you will learn everyday Chinese by communicating with Chinese students so that you can speak simple Chinese with local people. 這句話用了結(jié)果狀語從句， you will take part in different parties, knowing the history of China and Chinese culture , especially Chinese holidays, which will impress you deeply.這句話用了非限制性定語從句， you will have chances to visit some museums and tour the Great Wall, experiencing the colorful culture of China and the greatness of the Great Wall.這句話也用了現(xiàn)在分詞，還有范文還使用了Firstly，Secondly，What’s more,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加連貫。