Question

【題目】假設(shè)你叫李華，是一家英文雜志社的心理咨詢師。某中學(xué)生小王給你寫信，提到自己偏胖，想節(jié)食減肥，征求你的意見。請(qǐng)你給她回一封信，談?wù)勀銓?duì)該問(wèn)題的見解。內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：

1．健康的重要性；

2．學(xué)生的任務(wù)；

3．合理建議。

注意：

1．短文必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；

2．詞數(shù)：100左右。

3．參考詞匯：stateofmind心態(tài)

4．不需要寫題目

DearXiaoWang,

Ihavereceivedandreadyourletter,inwhichyoumentionedthatyouwantedtoloseweightbydieting.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Xiao Wang,

I have received and read your letter, in which you mentioned that you wanted to lose weight by dieting.

It is only natural that young girls at your age hope to look beautiful. However, in my opinion, health is more important than beauty. For a student, studying is the first thing to consider while appearance is the second. So do not let others’ opinions affect your normal life. However, if you do want to lose weight, it is a good idea to do it by getting more exercise and changing unhealthy eating habits. The most important thing is that you keep a healthy state of mind, as it will help with your studies, and will also hope you overcome difficulties I dieting.

I hope my advice will be helpful to you and I’m looking forward to your next letter.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇提綱類作文。文章內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出。考生在寫這篇文章時(shí)，要注意以下幾點(diǎn)：

1.通篇以一般將來(lái)時(shí)與現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主。

2. 要點(diǎn)要齊全。但是不要對(duì)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)單的羅列�？梢允褂眠m當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，使上下文行文流暢，銜接自然流程。

3. 注意文章要以書信的形式進(jìn)行敘述，言辭要誠(chéng)懇，一定要通過(guò)簡(jiǎn)單的例子作為支撐。否則會(huì)顯得說(shuō)服力不夠，內(nèi)容不夠豐滿。

【范文亮點(diǎn)】

文章以“I have received and read your letter, in which you mentioned that you wanted to lose weight by dieting.”開頭，直奔主題，開門見山，引出本文的主題。

文章采用了“However、as”等連接詞，使行文更加流暢，“it is a good idea to 做某事是一個(gè)好主意” “In my opinion在我看來(lái)”“ The most important thing is that最重要的是” “Looking forward to 期望做某事”等高分詞組。

I have received and read your letter, in which you mentioned that you wanted to lose weight by dieting. which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。