Question

7．中國人不善于向家人表達(dá)"愛"，但你認(rèn)為告訴家人你愛他們很重要．請以"Ways to express love to my family"為題，寫出如何向家人表達(dá)"愛"．
提示：1．如果父母生日，當(dāng)面向他們說"我愛你們"‘
 2．經(jīng)常幫助家人做家務(wù)；
3．經(jīng)常擁抱父母；
4．你自己的看法．
注意：1．詞數(shù)120左右；
 2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Ways to express love to my family．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇說明文．文章給出了簡單的漢語提示，以"Ways to express love to my family"為題，寫出如何向家人表達(dá)"愛"．寫作要點包括：1）如果父母生日，當(dāng)面向他們說"我愛你們"；2）經(jīng)常幫助家人做家務(wù)；3）經(jīng)常擁抱父母；4）你自己的看法．寫作時以第一人稱為主；時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．
重點詞匯：various（各種各樣的）；express（表達(dá)）；housework（家務(wù)勞動）；especially（尤其）；give sb a hug（擁抱某人）；do good to （對…有益）
高分句型：1．I am sure①if I often help my parents do some simple housework that I can do，②especially when they are tired after work，my parents must feel my love to them．
                  ①if引導(dǎo)條件狀語從句；②especially when they are tired after work在句中是插入語．
                 2．①Getting small but meaning gifts must be an exciting moment for my loved and I think I will do ②so ③on some special days．
                   ①動名詞短語Getting small but meaning gifts 在句中作主語；②so在這里作動詞do的賓語；③on some special days意為"在一些特殊的日子"．

解答 There are various ways to express love．I think saying"I Love you"on my father's or mother's birthday is a good way to let my parents know how I love them（高分句型一）．I am sure if I often help my parents do some simple housework that I can do，especially when they are tired after work，my parents must feel my love to them．
Besides，I will often give my parents a hug because I learn that people can get relaxed through a warm hug and feel connected to each other，which does good to their health．
Getting small but meaning gifts must be an exciting moment for my loved and I think I will do so on some special days（高分句型二）．

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意要點的提煉要全，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，還要注意人稱和時態(tài)使用要正確．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式．適當(dāng)使用一些高級詞匯、短語和句型，以提高文章的檔次；恰當(dāng)使用一些連詞和插入語，使文章表達(dá)自然、流暢．