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8．假定英語課上老師要求同桌之間交換修改作文，請(qǐng)你修改你同桌寫的以下作文．文中共有10處語言錯(cuò)誤，每句中最多有兩處，每處錯(cuò)誤僅涉及一個(gè)單詞的增加、刪除或修改．增加：在缺詞處加一個(gè)漏字符號(hào)（∧），并在其下面寫出該加的詞．刪除：把多余的詞用斜線（\）劃掉．修改：在錯(cuò)的詞下劃一橫線，并在該詞下面寫出修改后的詞．注意：1．每處錯(cuò)誤及其修改均限一詞． 2．只允許修改10處，多者（從第11處起）不計(jì)分．
Once，when l was a teenager，my father and I were standing in line to buy ticket for the circus．Finally，there was only one family among us and the ticket counter．This family made deep impression on me．There were eight children，both probably under the age of twelve．You could tell they didn't have a lot of money．Their clothes was not expensive，and they were clean．The children were well-behaved，all of them standing in line，two-by-two behind their parents，held hands．They were excitedly talking about the clowns，elephants and other performances what they would see that night．Everyone could sense that they have never been to the circus ago．

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分析 本文主要講述作者和父親買票看馬戲時(shí)發(fā)生的故事．這是一個(gè)有著八個(gè)孩子的家庭，父母帶孩子們?nèi)タ瘩R戲，都可能在十二歲以下．他們肯定沒有許多錢，雖然他們穿的衣服不貴，但很干凈．最后這家人如愿以償?shù)目瓷狭笋R戲．

解答 Once，when l was a teenager，my father and I were standing in line to buy ticket for the circus．Finally，there was only one family among us and the ticket counter．This family made∧deep impression on me．There were eight children，both probably under the age of twelve．You could tell they didn't have a lot of money．Their clothes was not expensive，and they were clean．The children were well-behaved，all of them standing in line，two-by-two behind their parents，held hands．They were excitedly talking about the clowns，elephants and other performances what they would see that night．Everyone could sense that theyhave never been to the circus ago．
詳解：
1．ticket改為tictets 考查名詞復(fù)數(shù)．ticket是可數(shù)名詞，根據(jù)上下文語境要用復(fù)數(shù)形式．
2．a(chǎn)mong改為between 考查介詞．between一般指"兩者之間"，而among用于三個(gè)或三個(gè)以上的人或物之中，或籠統(tǒng)的一群人或一些物之中，表示"在…中間"．此處應(yīng)是：兩者之間．
3．加a 考查冠詞．impression是可數(shù)名詞，單數(shù)形式前加不定冠詞a表示泛指．
4．both改為all 考查代詞．根據(jù)前文eight children，要用all指代，both指代兩者．
5．was改為were 考查主謂一致．主語clothes表示復(fù)數(shù)概念，謂語動(dòng)詞也要用復(fù)數(shù)形式were．
6．a(chǎn)nd改為but 考查連詞．前后兩個(gè)分句之間表示轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系而非并列關(guān)系，用連詞but．
7．去掉were 考查動(dòng)詞語態(tài)．behave是不及物動(dòng)詞，沒有被語態(tài)，were是多余的，要去掉．
8．what改為which/that或去掉what 考查定語從句．分析句子結(jié)構(gòu)可知這是一個(gè)定語從句，先行詞the clowns，elephants and other performances在從句中作see的賓語，用關(guān)系代詞which/that．關(guān)系代詞在定語從句中作賓語時(shí)也可省略，即去掉what．
9．have改為had 考查動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)．sense后接的賓語從句中動(dòng)作發(fā)生在主句動(dòng)作之前，即"過去的過去"，要用過去完成時(shí)態(tài)．
10．a(chǎn)go改為before 考查副詞．a(chǎn)go表示"從現(xiàn)在起的若干時(shí)間以前"，意思是"距今…以前"，需和過去時(shí)或過去進(jìn)行時(shí)連用．before泛指"從過去起的若干時(shí)間以前"，意思是"距過去某時(shí)…以前"，常和完成時(shí)連用，尤其在間接引語中．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 高考短文改錯(cuò)題的形式有說明文，短文故事，書信等，具有很強(qiáng)的實(shí)用性．短文的內(nèi)容和語言都符合高中學(xué)生的實(shí)際，從表面上看類似一篇學(xué)生習(xí)作．首先，通讀全文，了解短文大意，把握全篇的時(shí)態(tài)、人稱及行文邏輯，在通讀全文時(shí)把一些容易的錯(cuò)誤先改好，再進(jìn)行逐句改錯(cuò)．其次，要進(jìn)行逐個(gè)句子的改錯(cuò)．這是要對(duì)文中的詞法、句法和語篇著重分析和特別注意．最后把改好的短文再閱讀一遍，檢查答案是否正確，感覺是否還有不妥之處，最終形成定稿．