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【題目】2014年全國發(fā)生數(shù)起嚴重的校園暴力事件，某中學(xué)高三8班圍繞校園安全問題召開主題班會。假定你是班長李華，以“How to protect ourselves in campus violence”為標(biāo)題寫一篇發(fā)言稿，主要包括如下內(nèi)容：

1．校園暴力事件已引起廣泛關(guān)注。

2．要求每個學(xué)生都學(xué)習(xí)相關(guān)知識，增強自身防范能力。

3．遇到校園暴力時要采取適當(dāng)措施，包括：保持冷靜，判斷清楚自己的處境和可能的危險；盡一切可能避免人身傷害；及時報警。

注意：1．詞數(shù)120左右；開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，但不計入總詞數(shù)。

2．可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

參考詞匯：增強—enhance

How to protect ourselves in campus violence

Dear friends,

This year, some seriously violent incidents happened in campus, resulting in very bad results.

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That’s all. Thank you!

Answer 1

【答案】

How to protect ourselves in campus violence

Dear friends,

This year, some seriously violent incidents happened in campus, resulting in very bad results. The incidents of campus violence have drawn widespread attention in our country. As a student, we should learn some knowledge about how to deal with the violence and enhance the ability of self-protection.

Of course, if we meet the violence, we should take appropriate measures to protect ourselves. At first, we’d better keep calm, judge the situation and be aware of the possible dangers. Then, we should try our best to escape or prevent the violence. At last but not least, we should call the police or teachers as soon as possible to avoid the physical injury.

That’s all. Thank you.

【解析】

試題分析：本題要求寫一篇發(fā)言稿，引導(dǎo)大家關(guān)注校園暴力事件，要求每個學(xué)生都學(xué)習(xí)相關(guān)知識，增強自身防范能力，并簡單介紹了當(dāng)遭遇校園暴力時所應(yīng)當(dāng)采取的措施。注意觀點明確，條理清晰，注意發(fā)言稿的格式，稱呼和結(jié)尾的格式。時態(tài)：用一般現(xiàn)在時。結(jié)構(gòu)上，可以先從材料給的信息入手，逐步深入分析原因。使用一些高級句型和詞匯提升作文檔次。

【亮點說明】文章結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，第一段簡明扼要說明現(xiàn)象，及學(xué)生面對這種情況應(yīng)該采取的態(tài)度與措施，第二段詳細說明應(yīng)該注意的地方以及正確應(yīng)對危險的方法；draw attention in, take measures to, be aware of, try one’s best to, 等詞組的使用使文章更生動；at first, then, at last but not least使文章條理清晰；This year, some seriously violent incidents happened in campus, resulting in very bad results. 用了非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)，長短句結(jié)合，使句子更簡潔明了，更連貫。