Question

【題目】Oseola McCarty spent more than 75 years washing and ironing other people’s clothes．As a laundrywoman, she was paid only a few dollars each time．Certainly nobody would consider her rich, so they were all amazed when Miss McCarty decided to donate $ 150,000 to the University of Southern Mississippi．

The money was in fact her life savings．She could save such a large amount of money because she lived a very simple life．She never learned to drive, and when she wanted to go somewhere, she just walked．She never flew to anywhere till the donation，and in 50 years she had been out of the South only once．The house in which she lived was also a rather modest one her last uncle left her．Only after she became known in America did she begin to travel all over the country．Since then, she had been the subject of many interviews and articles and was even invited to the White House．

Her donation was for students who clearly needed financial help．She herself left school in the sixth grade and had never married or had children．She said to the reporters that the idea of helping somebody’s child go to college gave her much pleasure．

【寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容】

用約120個(gè)詞就Miss McCarty的捐助談?wù)勀愕南敕�，�?nèi)容包括：

（1）你如何看待她的捐助行為；

你認(rèn)為她的捐助對(duì)受惠學(xué)生有哪些影響；

（3）如果你自己要捐助，你會(huì)選擇哪個(gè)群體并陳述理由。

[寫(xiě)作要求]

1．作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文的句子。

2．作文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

Oseola McCarty was a laundrywoman for more than 75 years．She earned a few dollars each time．But she donated $150,000 which was her life savings to help the students who needed financial help．

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Answer 1

【答案】Oseola McCarty was a laundrywoman for more than 75 years．She earned a few dollars each time．But she donated $150,000 which was her life savings to help the students who needed financial help．I think her behavior is worth praising and very unselfish．Everyone should help others in need．But how much to donate should be based on our actual situation．The $150,000 is very helpful to the students who have financial problems．They can buy many things they need as other students．And they may be more grateful and kinder．Therefore, it’s more likely for them to help others in the future．If I am going to give donations, I will choose students too．They are in the most important period in their life．They need to get a long education．They have to buy a lot of books, pencil-cases, pens, erasers and so on, which will certainly cost a lot．They are growing up rapidly, which needs a lot of nutrition．If they don’t have enough money, they can’t eat enough food and take in enough energy．In a word, money is very important to students．(189 words)

【解析】該作文是給材料作文。根據(jù)短文寫(xiě)一篇文章，首先要看懂寓言說(shuō)的是什么，然后圍繞中心意思結(jié)合自己的經(jīng)歷進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作。文章主題注意條理要清晰，邏輯順序和結(jié)構(gòu)要恰當(dāng)，同時(shí)要盡量保持簡(jiǎn)潔精干的內(nèi)容，不拖泥帶水。要注意題中所給的信息，不可偏題，應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作對(duì)于文章內(nèi)容的要求是要達(dá)到寫(xiě)作目的。盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。使用一些高級(jí)句型和詞匯提升作文檔次．

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】 原文給出的句子不看。答案第一句But she donated $150,000 which was her life savings to help the students who needed financial help．使用了兩個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句，一個(gè)是which引導(dǎo)的修飾$150,000，另一個(gè)是who引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句修飾students。但是她捐贈(zèng)了她全部積蓄的十五萬(wàn)美金來(lái)幫助那些需要財(cái)政幫助的孩子們。答案第二段第一句提出自己的觀點(diǎn)。第四句 The $150,000 is very helpful to the students who have financial problems．也是一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句，who修飾前面的students，在從句中做主語(yǔ)。第三段第一句是一個(gè)if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句。If I am going to give donations, I will choose students too．如果我想要捐錢，我也會(huì)選擇捐獻(xiàn)給學(xué)生。 第四句是一個(gè)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句 They have to buy a lot of books, pencil-cases, pens, erasers and so on, which will certainly cost a lot．他們需要買很多的書(shū)、鉛筆盒、筆、橡皮擦等等一些東西，這些一定會(huì)花費(fèi)很多錢。第五句和第四句結(jié)構(gòu)，一樣也是一個(gè)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句They are growing up rapidly, which needs a lot of nutrition．他們快速的成長(zhǎng)著，這需要很多的營(yíng)養(yǎng)。第六句If they don’t have enough money, they can’t eat enough food and take in enough energy．是一個(gè)if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，如果他們沒(méi)有足夠的錢，他們不會(huì)遲到足夠的食物，吸收足夠的能量。除了很多從句以外，本文也用了一些比較好的短語(yǔ)如第二段的 be worth doing 值得做某事；based on基于；it’s likely to 很有可能做； In a word總而言之。這是一篇比較不錯(cuò)的范文。