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2．我校將于5月30日組織高三年級學生進行遠足，假設你是學生會主席，向?qū)W生發(fā)布此通知：
活動意義：走進自然，感受大自然的氣息；考驗學生毅力；強身健體．
路線：從學校出發(fā)，沿北京路向西行進，終點鳳凰谷．
出行建議：1．穿結(jié)實的鞋，因為要走很多的路．
                  2．自帶水和食物，中午在鳳凰谷野餐．
                  3．可自帶相機，與自然或同學合影留念．
最后祝大家出游愉快．
注意事項：1．字數(shù)：100 左右
                 2．參考詞匯：鳳凰谷：the Fenghuang Valley 目的地：destination
                 3．短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和地名．
Hello，my dear fellows，I'm the president of the Students Union．
Here comes the good news，our school intends to organize an outing for Senior Three students on May 30th，which aims at us embracing nature，testing our will power and building up our strength．（高分句型一）We will start from our school，walk along the Beijing Road and finally come to our destination-the Fenghuang Valley．
As we will do a lot of walking，you'd better wear strong shoes．Make sure to take some water and food with you for we will have a picnic in the valley at noon．（高分句型二）If possible，you can take a camera to take some pictures．（高分句型三）Finally，wish everyone a good trip．．

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分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息 我校將于5月30日組織高三年級學生進行遠足，假設你是學生會主席，向?qū)W生發(fā)布此通知．寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：活動意義；路線；出行建議；最后祝大家出游愉快．    2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：intend to 打算，想要做；aim at目的是；build up our strength增強體魄；Make sure確保；take some pictures拍照；Finally最后；
Here comes the good news，our school intends to organize an outing for Senior Three students on May 30th，which aims at us embracing nature，testing our will power and building up our strength．（高分句型一）
Make sure to take some water and food with you for we will have a picnic in the valley at noon．（高分句型二）
If possible，you can take a camera to take some pictures．（高分句型三）

解答 Hello，my dear fellows，I'm the president of the Students Union．
      Here comes the good news，our school intends to organize an outing for Senior Three students on May 30th，which aims at us embracing nature，testing our will power and building up our strength．（高分句型一）We will start from our school，walk along the Beijing Road and finally come to our destination-the Fenghuang Valley．
      As we will do a lot of walking，you'd better wear strong shoes．Make sure to take some water and food with you for we will have a picnic in the valley at noon．（高分句型二）If possible，you can take a camera to take some pictures．（高分句型三）Finally，wish everyone a good trip．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．