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2．我校將于5月30日組織高三年級(jí)學(xué)生進(jìn)行遠(yuǎn)足，假設(shè)你是學(xué)生會(huì)主席，向?qū)W生發(fā)布此通知：
活動(dòng)意義：走進(jìn)自然，感受大自然的氣息；考驗(yàn)學(xué)生毅力；強(qiáng)身健體．
路線(xiàn)：從學(xué)校出發(fā)，沿北京路向西行進(jìn)，終點(diǎn)鳳凰谷．
出行建議：1．穿結(jié)實(shí)的鞋，因?yàn)橐�走很多的路�?br />                  2．自帶水和食物，中午在鳳凰谷野餐．
                  3．可自帶相機(jī)，與自然或同學(xué)合影留念．
最后祝大家出游愉快．
注意事項(xiàng)：1．字?jǐn)?shù)：100 左右
                 2．參考詞匯：鳳凰谷：the Fenghuang Valley 目的地：destination
                 3．短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和地名．
Hello，my dear fellows，I'm the president of the Students Union．
Here comes the good news，our school intends to organize an outing for Senior Three students on May 30th，which aims at us embracing nature，testing our will power and building up our strength．（高分句型一）We will start from our school，walk along the Beijing Road and finally come to our destination-the Fenghuang Valley．
As we will do a lot of walking，you'd better wear strong shoes．Make sure to take some water and food with you for we will have a picnic in the valley at noon．（高分句型二）If possible，you can take a camera to take some pictures．（高分句型三）Finally，wish everyone a good trip．．

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分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，根據(jù)提示信息 我校將于5月30日組織高三年級(jí)學(xué)生進(jìn)行遠(yuǎn)足，假設(shè)你是學(xué)生會(huì)主席，向?qū)W生發(fā)布此通知．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：活動(dòng)意義；路線(xiàn)；出行建議；最后祝大家出游愉快．    2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：intend to 打算，想要做；aim at目的是；build up our strength增強(qiáng)體魄；Make sure確保；take some pictures拍照；Finally最后；
Here comes the good news，our school intends to organize an outing for Senior Three students on May 30th，which aims at us embracing nature，testing our will power and building up our strength．（高分句型一）
Make sure to take some water and food with you for we will have a picnic in the valley at noon．（高分句型二）
If possible，you can take a camera to take some pictures．（高分句型三）

解答 Hello，my dear fellows，I'm the president of the Students Union．
      Here comes the good news，our school intends to organize an outing for Senior Three students on May 30th，which aims at us embracing nature，testing our will power and building up our strength．（高分句型一）We will start from our school，walk along the Beijing Road and finally come to our destination-the Fenghuang Valley．
      As we will do a lot of walking，you'd better wear strong shoes．Make sure to take some water and food with you for we will have a picnic in the valley at noon．（高分句型二）If possible，you can take a camera to take some pictures．（高分句型三）Finally，wish everyone a good trip．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．