Question

下列圖表反映的是某高中2010年與2013年學(xué)生健康狀況調(diào)查的部分?jǐn)?shù)據(jù)，請(qǐng)你用英語為某報(bào)寫一份報(bào)告，反映你校三年間學(xué)生健康狀況的變化情況，分析其中原因，并提出一些改進(jìn)措施。
注意事項(xiàng)：1. 報(bào)告必須包括圖表中所有內(nèi)容，但不要逐條羅列；
2. 詞數(shù)120詞左右。題目和開頭第一句已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Health
A recent survey shows that the health of the students in our school has been going from bad to worse in the past three years.___________________________________________________________________________________
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Answer 1

Health
A recent survey shows that the health of the students in our school has been going from bad to worse in the past three years. The number of short-sighted students has increased from 77% in 2010 to 93.5% in 2013, while that of overweight students from 38% to 57.2%. Nearly 15% more students don’t have enough sleep because of more homework. Besides, over 21% more students become mentally unhealthy.
It seems to me that the reasons for this lie in heavier burden of study and more homework, thus making students unable to spare any time to take exercise or have enough sleep.To improve students’ health, we call for less homework. Only in this way can students get plenty of sleep and be more healthy. Proper diets and exercise should also be paid attention to so that they won’t easily put on weight. With their heavy burdens removed, students can then keep in normal mental health.

試題分析：題目要求用英文寫一份報(bào)告，反映三年間學(xué)生的健康狀況，分析原因并提出改進(jìn)的措施。作文必須包含圖表中的所有內(nèi)容，不要逐條翻譯，要有一定的邏輯性和條理性。用第一人稱來寫，注意拼寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)、時(shí)態(tài)和語法知識(shí)的正確運(yùn)用。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文使用了大量的固定短語和固定搭配：The number of, has increased from ...to, because of, the reasons for, lie in, take exercise, call for, plenty of, be paid attention to, so that, put on weight等，使作文顯得充實(shí)，有說服力；
范文注意使用while, Besides, thus, To improve students’ health等來銜接上下文，做到了語意連貫；
范文還使用了一些重要的語法知識(shí)：主語從句It seems to me that...；非謂語動(dòng)詞thus making students unable to spare any time...；倒裝Only in this way can students get plenty of sleep...；被動(dòng)句Proper diets and exercise should also be paid attention to；目的狀語從句so that they won’t easily put on weight；with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)With their heavy burdens removed等，語法知識(shí)掌握得很扎實(shí)。