Question

請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面提示，寫一篇短文。詞數(shù)不少于50。

         In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.

詞數(shù)少于50，從總分中減去1分。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

         In the picture we can see a boy climbing a platform．He is taking great trouble to reach, die top of the stairs, ignoring the comparatively lower stairs beside him．

         The picture reminds me of those who dream of achieving great success every day．They are so eager to succeed that they hope to get to their destinations as quickly as possible．They don't realize there are longer but safer ways for them to make it．As a result, they may seem rather close to their goals, but the fact is on the contrary．

         In my opinion, we should focus on the process of fighting fop success．As long as every step is proper, sooner or later we will gain what we long for．

 【解析】

試題分析：本文是篇圖畫作文，圖畫非常簡(jiǎn)單，描繪了一個(gè)人想走捷徑成功的做法�？忌�在寫作之前認(rèn)真思考內(nèi)容是否充實(shí)、健康，思維活躍，邏輯清晰，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，交際得體。還要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，這是我們?nèi)粘Ｉ�活中存在的一種現(xiàn)象，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。圖片中的人是有些人的做法和想法，需要用第三人稱；個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)要用第一人稱。再有就是應(yīng)該注意使用較高級(jí)的句子和句子之間的連貫，以提高作文的檔次。還要注意細(xì)節(jié)如拼寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)或書寫。詞數(shù)要求等。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)為文章增色不少，比如remind me of... ，on the contrary，focus on, sooner or later，還運(yùn)用了so...that 句式; who引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：As a result，As long as  等等。值得我們借鑒學(xué)習(xí)。

考點(diǎn)：情景作文。