Question

【題目】假如你是李華，是某報(bào)英語(yǔ)專欄“Heart-to-Heart”的一名編輯。近期，你收到來(lái)自高中生Sarah的求助信如下。請(qǐng)根據(jù)來(lái)信內(nèi)容，給Sarah寫(xiě)一封回信。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

Dear Li Hua,

As a freshman in high school,I badly need your help with my sleep problem.The school rule goes that for every dormitory（宿舍）,students are only allowed（被允許）to keep the lights on before 10:40 p.m.So we should all go to bed after 10:40.However,one of my roommates（室友）often washes her clothes as late as 11:00 p.m.,and some others even turn on their flashlights（手電筒）to do homework.The noise and the light really make it hard for me to fall asleep（入睡）,I want to tell them to stop it,but I worry it will harm our relationships.What should I do?

Yours,

Sarah

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sarah,

I'm sorry to hear about your trouble,and I deeply understand how upset one can be with his sleep disturbed.I hope the following can help you out.

It is clear that the problem lies with your roommates,who go against the school rule and influence others’ life. Have a quiet talk with them,telling them the harm staying up late does to the body.Then,explain your situation to them sincerely,without sounding angry or fault-finding.I believe they'll understand you and will be willing to work out a solution with you.

If it still doesn't work,you may as well turn to your head teacher.I'm sure everything will turn out OK as long as you deal with the matter with calmness and patience.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文，要求寫(xiě)一封回信。首先要讀懂來(lái)信，再根據(jù)來(lái)信中的問(wèn)題給出建議。本文內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文結(jié)構(gòu)合理，涵蓋了所有要點(diǎn)。文章流暢通順，且使用了一些復(fù)雜句式，如It is clear that the problem lies with your roommates, who go against the school rule and influence others’ life.包含了一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句。Have a quiet talk with them,telling them the harm staying up late does to the body.這個(gè)句子使用了非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做狀語(yǔ)，這些都為文章增色不少。