Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，寫(xiě)一篇英文周記，記述你們上周接待外國(guó)學(xué)生，帶領(lǐng)他們體驗(yàn)中國(guó)茶文化的全過(guò)程。

注意：詞數(shù)不少于60。

(請(qǐng)務(wù)必將作文寫(xiě)在答題卡指定區(qū)域內(nèi))

Answer 1

【答案】Last week, we took the foreign students in our school to experience the authentic tea culture, which turned out be to extremely rewarding.

On arriving at the tea house, the foreign students were impressed by the unique tea pots and tea cups. I gave them a vivid and informative introduction of tea culture, including its profound history, its rich variety, and the exquisite craftsmanship of making tea with their interest greatly sparked, I then began to teach them how to make tea.

In order to deliver a clear presentation, I slowly explained the traditional procedure of making tea in detail. Absorbed in every move of mine, the foreign students were once again amazed by this unique culture and they couldn’t help taking pictures from time to time.

Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves. Washing the tea pots, adding tea leaves, and pouring water into the cups, they followed my instructions and were really immersed in charming tea culture. The tea house witnessed a really enjoyable time for all of us.

At the end of the activity, holding the tea bags in our hands, we took a picture to memorize the unforgettable day. It suddenly hit me that traditional culture like tea culture was of great charm and huge value. And I swelled with pride to spread our own culture to people all over the world.

【解析】本文為圖片介紹類(lèi)作文，這類(lèi)作文是根據(jù)給出的一幅或幾幅圖畫(huà)所提供的信息寫(xiě)短文。此類(lèi)題的體裁較廣泛，可以是記敘文、說(shuō)明文，也可以是議論文。按照本文的要求可知，是寫(xiě)一篇記敘文。

1. 認(rèn)真讀圖，把握中心。

根據(jù)提示可知，內(nèi)容是帶領(lǐng)外國(guó)學(xué)生體驗(yàn)中國(guó)茶文化的全過(guò)程，介紹了茶具，泡茶，沏茶，品茶的過(guò)程，所以這是這組圖畫(huà)所要表達(dá)的中心。

2. 初步構(gòu)思，考慮用詞、短語(yǔ)、句型和時(shí)態(tài)。

在把握了文章的中心后，應(yīng)在內(nèi)心構(gòu)思一個(gè)基本的框架，并考慮使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)和句型，以充分地表達(dá)文章的內(nèi)容。本文是講述上周發(fā)生的事情，故時(shí)態(tài)要以過(guò)去時(shí)為主，人稱是第一人稱，盡可能地充分利用所學(xué)的短語(yǔ)或句型來(lái)表述具體的內(nèi)容。這是體現(xiàn)自身能力的重要一環(huán)。

3. 連詞成句，然后再連句成文。

運(yùn)用適當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~或短語(yǔ)正確表達(dá)各圖的意思。然后再將各圖的單個(gè)句子串連起來(lái)。

串連時(shí)，要注意使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞語(yǔ)或過(guò)渡性語(yǔ)句，不至于讓讀者覺(jué)得文章中出現(xiàn)跳躍現(xiàn)象，更使上下文更為緊湊、自然。

4. 反復(fù)審核，修改錯(cuò)誤。

一篇文章寫(xiě)好后，應(yīng)進(jìn)行檢查，看短文中是否有錯(cuò)，如拼寫(xiě)、用詞、時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)及表達(dá)方面的錯(cuò)誤。

5. 宜詳則詳，該略則略。

對(duì)于一些細(xì)節(jié)方面的內(nèi)容，如果是文章必不可少的，在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中是不可將其忽略的。

如果是可有可無(wú)的細(xì)節(jié)，則可視具體情況進(jìn)行增刪。據(jù)此，我們?cè)谧x圖時(shí)一定要注意閱讀各圖中的一些細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容，看其是否影響文章的內(nèi)容。

亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：

巧妙使用定語(yǔ)從句，提升了文章檔次：Last week, we took the foreign students in our school to experience the authentic tea culture, which turned out be to extremely rewarding.

使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，使句子表達(dá)更簡(jiǎn)潔：

On arriving at the tea house…

I gave them a vivid and informative introduction of tea culture, including its profound history, its rich variety,

Absorbed in every move of mine, the foreign students were once again amazed by this unique culture

holding the tea bags in our hands, we took a picture to memorize the unforgettable day.

使用倒裝句突出重點(diǎn)。

Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves.

使用it做形式主語(yǔ)，使表達(dá)更地道。

It suddenly hit me that traditional culture like tea culture was of great charm and huge value.