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16．Tchaikovsky，a famous Russian composer of the late-Romantic period，was born on 7 May 1840 in the mountains of western Russia．He was the first Russian composer whose music made a lasting impression internationally．Tchaikovsky's training set him on a path to combine what he had learned with the native musical practices to which he had been exposed from childhood．He first helped write a song in 1844，at an age when most children are still in kindergarten．At home，his mother sang folk songs，which helped develop his interest in music．Mozart was Tchaikovsky's favourite composer and he influenced Tchaikovsky's life and work．For 11 years，beginning in 1866，Tchaikovsky taught at the Moscow School of Music．During his time there，he wrote music for the piano，along with ballets，operas and symphonies．He was famous for writing the music for the ballet Swan Lake in 1876．Because of his musical talent，Tchaikovsky toured many countries as a conductor，including a voyage to the USA in 1891．He continued to write for the ballet until his death in Saint Petersburg in 1893．
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2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
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[評分標準]內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)．
Tchaikovsky's talent in music is just the first step to success．His mother，idol，hard work also play an important part in the process of his success．He is even committed to music until death．
After reading through Tchaikovsky's life story，we can learn upwards of two lessons as follows．First，one should set a big goal and spare no effort in achievingit．Tchaikovsky's life-long goal was to catch up with his idol Mozart，who influenced his life and work．Second，one should commit one's whole being to work．Tchaikovsky wrote music for ten years and finally created his masterpiece，Swan Lake．
When it comes to commitment to work，I shall count it as a personal favour．I was once poor in math，but I swore to get it improved in my senior year，so I devoted myself to math in classroom，library and anywhere possible and made it eventually．（151 words）．

Answer 1

分析 寫好這類作文要注意幾個步驟：1． 認真審題，找準提示語中的關(guān)鍵詞或句，確定中心思想．2． 依據(jù)關(guān)鍵句，草擬提綱，梳理文章的脈絡(luò)3． 準確定位人稱、時態(tài)．注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．4．最后還要認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等
高分句型一：
Tchaikovsky's life-long goal was to catch up with his idol Mozart，who influenced his life and work
柴可夫斯基的終身目標是趕上他的偶像莫扎特，他影響他的生活和工作．
高分句型二：
I was once poor in math，but I swore to get it improved in my senior year，so I devoted myself to math in classroom，library and anywhere possible and made it eventually．
曾經(jīng)在數(shù)學(xué)方面很糟糕，但我發(fā)誓要在高中一年級時提高它，所以我在教室、圖書館和任何可能的地方致力于數(shù)學(xué)，最終攻克了他．

解答 Tchaikovsky's talent in music is just the first step to success．His mother，idol，hard work also play an important part in the process of his success．He is even committed to music until death．
      After reading through Tchaikovsky's life story，we can learn upwards of two lessons as follows．First，one should set a big goal and spare no effort in achieving it．Tchaikovsky's life-long goal was to catch up with his idol Mozart，who influenced his life and work（高分句型一）．Second，one should commit one's whole being to work．Tchaikovsky wrote music for ten years and finally created his masterpiece，Swan Lake．
      When it comes to commitment to work，I shall count it as a personal favour．I was once poor in math，but I swore to get it improved in my senior year，so I devoted myself to math in classroom，library and anywhere possible and made it eventually（高分句型二）．（151 words）

點評 開放性作文給出一定的寫作主題，并此為基礎(chǔ)進行思維和聯(lián)想，自由發(fā)揮．不僅考查學(xué)生在內(nèi)容、結(jié)構(gòu)安排、語言運用和組織方面的能力，而且對學(xué)生的想像力、發(fā)散思維、歸納判斷能力也有很高的要求．