Question

【題目】假如你是李華，在倫敦做交換生，昨天你的室友Tony在校園摔倒后住院。請給校求助中心寫封郵件，尋找?guī)椭?/span>Tony的中國學(xué)生。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右

2. 可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文流暢。

3. 郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

DearSir/Madam,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir/madam,

I am Li Hua, an exchange student from China. I am writing to ask you to look for a Chinese student.

Yesterday, my roommate Tony was on the way to the classroom when he fell down and could hardly move. Just at that moment, a Chinese girl came to him. She gave him first aid and called an ambulance. Thanks to the kind girl, Tony was sent to hospital in time. But the girl left quietly before Tony could express his thanks. The girl is about 18 years old and of medium height with short hair. Tony is eager to meet her to express his sincere thanks. Could you please help find her?

Looking forwards to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：本文是半開放式作文。你是在倫敦做交換生的李華，昨天你的室友Tony在校園摔倒后住院。要求你給校求助中心寫封郵件，尋找?guī)椭?/span>Tony的中國學(xué)生。寫作時不要逐句翻譯，可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫同時要把所提示的點寫全，語句通順，同時要注意準確運用時態(tài)、語態(tài)、上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。根據(jù)句意適當(dāng)使用并列連詞，同時也要合理運用高級詞匯和高級句子為文章增色添彩。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右2.郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

【亮點說明】

本文是一篇電子郵件，文章格式正確，內(nèi)容齊全，布局合理，使用高級句子。I am Li Hua, an exchange student from China.句子看似簡單卻，其實用了同位語；Yesterday, my roommate Tony was on the way to the classroom when he fell down固定句式，when的特殊用法；Tony was sent to hospital in time.使用一般過去時態(tài)的被動語態(tài)，顯得句子豐富多彩；the girl left quietly before Tony could express his thanks. Before引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句；Could you please help find her?問句的運用別具一格；另外，Just at that moment, Thanks to the kind girl, But等的使用，為文章增色添彩。