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2．假如你是李華，是一名高中生．隨著科技的發(fā)展，iPad已成為中學(xué)生的新寵．用iPad既可以聽音樂，閱讀純文本電子書，又可玩電子游戲．請(qǐng)你用英語給某英語報(bào)社寫一封信，談?wù)勚袑W(xué)生使用iPad的情況．信的內(nèi)容必須包括以下幾點(diǎn)：
1、使 用iPad對(duì)學(xué)習(xí)的好處，
2、對(duì)課堂紀(jì)律和學(xué)習(xí)可能產(chǎn)生的負(fù)面影響，
3、提出自己的建議并說明理由．
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Dear Editor'，
I'm a senior high school student named Li Hua．Now many students have iPads and think it's a fashion to use them．                                             

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分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文   本文同時(shí)還屬于議論文，要求考生以李華的身份給某英語報(bào)社寫一封信，談?wù)剬W(xué)使用iPad的情況．所以本文使用第三人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．要點(diǎn)：1．使用iPad的好處：可以聽音樂放松，下載有用的學(xué)習(xí)資料，對(duì)英語學(xué)習(xí)尤其有效．2．負(fù)面影響：有學(xué)生聽音樂時(shí)，對(duì)其他同學(xué)的學(xué)習(xí)產(chǎn)生不好影響．有學(xué)生在教室里使用iPad玩游戲，不但浪費(fèi)了時(shí)間而且成績(jī)還急劇下降．過多使用iPad還影響視力．3．個(gè)人建議和理由：應(yīng)該好好利用iPad有利的一面，要學(xué)習(xí)下載的有用的學(xué)習(xí)材料．建議學(xué)生對(duì)于iPad的使用時(shí)間要適當(dāng)控制．建議文章分成三段，三個(gè)要點(diǎn)各成一段．寫作時(shí)注意技巧的運(yùn)用，尤其要盡量使用高級(jí)詞匯及句式以增加文章的層次．
【名師點(diǎn)睛】
本篇范文結(jié)構(gòu)合理，用詞地道流暢．上下文承轉(zhuǎn)自然，無中國式英語，時(shí)態(tài)和人稱使用準(zhǔn)確無誤．文章中句式多樣，既有陳述句，也有祈使句．使用了較多的高級(jí)句式，如定語從句…which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．分詞做狀語Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen．同時(shí)文章中高級(jí)詞匯使用也較多，如apparently，achieve academic success等；范文中還使用了較多的串聯(lián)才，如in my opinion，furthermore等．
Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen．（高分句型一）
Some students，however，bring their iPads to the classroom and listen to music without earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．（高分句型二）
The classroom is a place for students to study，and therefore concentration is awfully needed for us to learn our lessons．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Editor，
      I'm a senior high school student named Li Hua．Now many students have iPads and think it's a fashion to use them．Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen．（高分句型一）Apparently，it's helpful to our study，especially to our English listening．
      Some students，however，bring their iPads to the classroom and listen to music without earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．（高分句型二）Some of them even waste precious time in class playing video games．
      In my opinion，as students，we should make good use of iPads to help achieve academic success．The classroom is a place for students to study，and therefore concentration is awfully needed for us to learn our lessons．（高分句型三）Furthermore，the school should make a rule to guide the students to use iPads in a proper way．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．