Question

【題目】假如你是高三學生李華，今年參加高考，考后就要面臨填報志愿， 你一直想當老師， 可父母的愿望是讓你當醫(yī)生。請用英語給你在美國的叔叔寫封信， 陳述你的愿望和理由，請求叔叔幫忙，以說服你的父母。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.開頭和結(jié)尾已給出（不計入總詞數(shù)）。

Dear Uncle,

How I miss you! As you know, after the College Entrance Examination, filling the intention for university is around the corner.

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Looking forward to your rely soon!

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Uncle,

How I miss you! As you know, after the College Entrance Examination, filling the intention for university is around the corner. My parents want me to be a doctor. However, being a teacher is my favorite profession.

To begin with, Mr. Wang, a perfect maths teacher, has a great influence on me, from whom I have learned a lot both in my study and in life. Moreover, I like it when I stay with the young and energetic students, helping them learn new things and broaden their horizons. Meanwhile, teachers are highly respected now and I can make full use of summer and winter holidays to do what I like. Typically, my parents like following your opinion. Therefore, I have no choice but to turn to you for help.

Looking forward to your reply soon!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：這是一篇英文書信，信的開頭結(jié)尾都已經(jīng)給出了，僅需要寫好正文。正文的內(nèi)容是：你今年參加高考，考后就要面臨填報志愿， 你一直想當老師， 可父母的愿望是讓你當醫(yī)生。給叔叔寫信， 陳述你的愿望和理由，請求叔叔幫忙，以說服你的父母。寫信與寫文章一樣，內(nèi)容要表達清楚，語言要簡單明了，態(tài)度要誠懇禮貌，給叔叔的信還應親切熱情。一定注意必須把規(guī)定的內(nèi)容寫清楚。寫作正文時就和寫提綱作文一樣，要點不能省略，要完全包括在內(nèi)。要注意使用合適的連接詞和高級的詞匯和短語，也可以使用不同的句式。

【亮點說明】本篇范文要點全面，短小精悍。在文中作者首先提出與父母在報志愿時存在分歧，然后分層陳述自己的理由，從老師對自己的影響，到自己對教學的熱愛，再寫到做老師被尊重，有假期可以做自己喜歡的事情等，層層遞進，清晰連貫。在寫作時作者使用了to begin with 、moreover、meanwhile、typically和therefore等連接詞使段落更具有層次感。文章還用到了非謂語動詞being a teacher作主語和helping them learn new things and broaden their horizons作狀語，限制性定語從句from whom I have learned a lot both in my study and in life和賓語從句I like it when I stay with the young and energetic students和do what I like等多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)，并且詞組has a great influence on、broaden their horizons和have no choice but to也有效地提升了文章的檔次。