Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

一家英語報社向中學(xué)生征文，主題是”十年后的我”。請根據(jù)下列要點和你的暢想

完成短文。

1、 家庭

2、 工作

3、 業(yè)余生活

注意：1、詞數(shù)100左右;

2、可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫;

3. 開頭語已為你寫好

I often imagine what my life will be like in the future.

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Answer 1

【答案】

one Possible Version

I often imagine what my life will be like in the future. I think my life will be very different in ten years. I will be twenty-eight years old by then. I will have my own family. Probably with a lovely child. I hope I will work in a computer company as a program designer. I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues, I will do a good job in whatever I do. In my free time, I will continue to take regular exercise, such as swimming, running and various ball games. On my holidays, I will travel around the world. In a word, my life will be much richer and more colorful.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇記敘文，主題是“十年后的我”。在寫作時要注意從家庭、工作和業(yè)余生活三方面要點著手，因為提示信息較少，所以要充分發(fā)揮想象，增加適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，充實內(nèi)容。比如可以聯(lián)想到的內(nèi)容有健身，度假，聚會等等。在寫作時盡量使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，插入語以使文章層次分明，使用多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)和高級詞匯亮點來提高文章的檔次，如定語從句，賓語從句和狀語從句等。此外，因為是暢想未來，所以要用一般將來時。

【亮點說明】本篇范文短小精悍，要點全面，語言簡練，時態(tài)人稱準(zhǔn)確，很好的完成了寫作任務(wù)。在文章開頭作者緊扣題目，提出自己對未來的暢想，然后從生活，工作，家庭三個方面描述了自己十年后的生活。在文中作者用到了短語In my free time , In a word , such as等介詞短語，避免了文章句式的單一。此外，還用到了賓語從句in whatever I do、I will work in a computer company as a program designer等，這些都給樸素的語言帶來了亮點。