Question

中央號(hào)召創(chuàng)建節(jié)約型社會(huì)，可是許多校園內(nèi)部浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象嚴(yán)重。請(qǐng)你在班會(huì)課上發(fā)表演講，號(hào)召同學(xué)們從我做起，杜絕浪費(fèi)。
注意：1．詞數(shù)150左右；演講的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已寫(xiě)好，不記人總詞數(shù)。
2．不要逐字逐條翻譯，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文。

浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象	危害	措施
1．水、電。 2．餐廳的食物。 3．其他(由考生自己添加)	1．自身性格。 2．父母財(cái)政負(fù)擔(dān)。 3．自然資源	(內(nèi)容由考生自己添加)

Dear friends,
May I have your attention, please? Now I’d like to make a speech here.
With the improvement of living standard, there are a lot of waste on campus. For example the students_____________________________________________________________________________________
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That’s all. Thank you!

Answer 1

Dear friends，
May I have your attention, please? Now I’d like to make a speech here.
With the improvement of living standard, there are a lot of waste on campus. For example the students leave the lights on in the daytime, water running after washing and remains of a lot of food after eating on the table. Some of the students even ask their parents for pocket money. So it’s high time that we had to deal with the problem. The reasons are as follows: In the first place, the bad habit of being wasteful will have a bad influence on their own character. Secondly, it adds financial burden to their parents. Last but not the least, it also exhausts the world’s very limited natural resources, water and electricity.
But how to reduce the waste? In my opinion, it’s everyone’s business to fight against waste. On one hand, I should start with myself to save everything. On the other hand, I’d like to remind my friends here to take the lead in reducing the waste.
Therefore, I’m sure, with everyone’s doing his bit, we will charge the present situation.
That’s all. Thank you!

解析試題分析：本文是篇演講稿。內(nèi)容提示較詳細(xì)，考生容易把握寫(xiě)作要求和寫(xiě)作目的。考生在寫(xiě)作之前必修認(rèn)真審題，有部分內(nèi)容需要考生自己添加。首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和將來(lái)時(shí)。人稱(chēng)用第一和第三人稱(chēng)。根據(jù)寫(xiě)作要求文章分四段來(lái)寫(xiě)。第一段表明要發(fā)表演講。第二段重點(diǎn)描述浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象及其危害。第三段解決措施。第四段發(fā)起號(hào)召，演講結(jié)束。再有就是不能根據(jù)材料逐字逐句的翻譯應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章要點(diǎn)齊全，表達(dá)思路明確，知識(shí)點(diǎn)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)轿�，文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如have a bad influence on, add to, exhaust, fight against, remind sb to do等。還運(yùn)用了虛擬語(yǔ)氣it’s high time that we had to deal with the problem；非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞the students leave the lights on in the daytime, water running after washing...等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：In the first place, Secondly, Last but not the least, On one hand, On the other hand, Therefore等。
考點(diǎn)：演講稿