Question

5．你打算畢業(yè)后去美國留學(xué)，想咨詢你的美國朋友Chris，請你根據(jù)以下提示寫一封信．
1．目的：增長見識，體驗文化；
2．困惑：語言障礙，學(xué)業(yè)壓力；
3．征求建議．
注意：1．詞數(shù)不少于50
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
3．開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總次數(shù)．
Dear Chris，
I've been longing to go to American，mainly for two reasons．One is that I can experience American culture，and the other is that I canbroaden my mind in this country．But I have some worries．My English is a bit poor，especially spoken English．I'm afraid I'll have trouble communicating．Besides，I may suffer from heavypressure from college course．
I hope you can offer me some practical advice．
Look forward to your reply．
Yours
Joe．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，給美國朋友寫一封信．咨詢有關(guān)畢業(yè)后去美國留學(xué)的相關(guān)問題．
寫作時人稱以第一人稱和第三人稱為主，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．
寫作要點：1．介紹購物情況； 2．反映存在問題； 3．提出解決方案．重要短語：make one's decision （做決定），further study（繼續(xù)教育，進修，），long to go （渴望做某事），broaden one's mind （拓寬心靈），have trouble in doing （做某事有困難），suffer from （遭受，忍受，患），offer sb some practical advice （給某人一些實用的建議），look forward to（期望…）．
【高分句型】
1．One is that I can experience American culture，and the other is that I can broaden my mind in this country．
這里是由that引導(dǎo)的表語從句，that在句中起連接詞的作用，無詞義，不可省略．
2．I'm afraid I'll have trouble communicating．
這里是省略了that的賓語從句．

解答 Dear Chris，
I've finally made my decision to go to American for further study afterhigh school．
I've been longing to go to American，mainly for two reasons．One is that I can experience American culture，and the other is that I canbroaden my mind in this country．【高分句型】（目的）But I have some worries．My English is a bit poor，especially spoken English．I'm afraid I'll have trouble communicating．【高分句型】（困惑）Besides，I may suffer from heavypressure from college course．
I hope you can offer me some practical advice．（征求建議）
Look forward to your reply．
Yours
Joe

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．