Question

【題目】根據(jù)下面的提示，寫一篇題為“Smoking Is Harmful”的短文，說明吸煙的危害（100詞左右）

現(xiàn)在有些青少年抽煙，他們認為吸煙是一種享受（enjoyment）。

事實上吸煙有害健康，對青少年危害很大。

科學家和醫(yī)生通過實驗發(fā)現(xiàn)吸煙導致一些疾病，如心臟病heart trouble、癌癥cancer等。

世界上越來越多的人已經(jīng)戒煙或決心戒煙，我們青少年更不應該繼續(xù)做這種傻事。

我們學生應充分利用時間學習，做對祖國、對人民、對自己有益的事，養(yǎng)成良好習慣。

Answer 1

【答案】

Smoking Is Harmful

Now some middle school students smoke because they think smoking is an enjoyment.

In fact, smoking does harm to health especially to the teenagers. Doctors and scientists have found that smoking may cause serious illnesses, such as heart troubles or cancers. More and more people in the world have given up or have decided to get rid of smoking. We teenagers should stop doing such silly things, too.

We students should make full use of time to study, and do things to benefit our homeland, our people and ourselves. From now on, we should form good habits.

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