Question

1．假設(shè)你是李華，端午節(jié)放假期間和家人一起到天龍山國家森林公園（Tianlongshan National Forest Park）游玩，在游玩過程中發(fā)現(xiàn)了一些令你不滿意的地方，請(qǐng)你就此用英語給該景區(qū)主管部門的負(fù)責(zé)人寫一封信，投訴相關(guān)問題．內(nèi)容包括：
1．問題：私家車和單車亂停放；小販（vendor）圍住游客兜售商品；地上有亂扔的果皮，塑料袋，包裝紙等各種垃圾；廁所不干凈，有異味；路口指引標(biāo)志不清晰；游客太多．
2．你的建議：…（建議一、兩條即可）
注意：1．寫作內(nèi)容請(qǐng)勿超出作文紙所限范圍，超出部分無效；
2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出．
Dear Sir/Madam，
I am writing to make a complaint．This Dragon Boat Festival holiday I，as well as my family with great expectations of relaxing and enjoying ourselves，paid a visit to the famous tourist attraction，Tianlongshan National Forest Park．（高分句型一）However，I felt very disappointed at what I had experienced there．
As we got closer to the park，we found it more difficult for us to move forward，as many drivers parked their cars where they shouldn't park and cyclists put their bikes wherever they could，which badly blocked the way to the park．（高分句型二）Hardly had we got off the coach when we were surrounded by the vendors，whom we could hardly get rid of，trying their best to sell their goods．（高分句型三）To my relief，we finally managed to reach the forest area，and the fresh air and beautiful scenery there made me intoxicated．But the rubbish，such as fruit skins，food packages and plastic bags thrown here and there by tourists spoiled the view and my good mood．What's worse，the toilets are dirty and stinky．Apart from that，too many people and confusing road signs exhausted me and my patience．
Needless to say，it's time to take actions immediately to improve the unsatisfying conditions．I think，for example，more workers should be arranged to solve the problems of disorderly parking，and perhaps selling tickets online in advance is a good way to avoid the park being too crowded．（高分句型四）I hope in the near future the National Forest Park will become true to its name．I look forward to your reply．
Thank you for your consideration
Sincerely yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設(shè)你是李華，端午節(jié)放假期間和家人一起到天龍山國家森林公園（Tianlongshan National Forest Park）游玩，在游玩過程中發(fā)現(xiàn)了一些令你不滿意的地方，請(qǐng)你就此用英語給該景區(qū)主管部門的負(fù)責(zé)人寫一封信，投訴相關(guān)問題，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：問題：私家車和單車亂停放；小販（vendor）圍住游客兜售商品；地上有亂扔的果皮，塑料袋，包裝紙等各種垃圾；廁所不干凈，有異味；路口指引標(biāo)志不清晰；游客太多．你的建議：…（建議一、兩條即可）2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：make a complaint抱怨；as well as也，和；pay a visit to拜訪；However然而；get rid of去除，擺脫；Hardly…when一…就；Apart from出…之外；Needless to say無需多說；look forward to盼望；
This Dragon Boat Festival holiday I，as well as my family with great expectations of relaxing and enjoying ourselves，paid a visit to the famous tourist attraction，Tianlongshan National Forest Park．（高分句型一）
As we got closer to the park，we found it more difficult for us to move forward，as many drivers parked their cars where they shouldn't park and cyclists put their bikes wherever they could，which badly blocked the way to the park．（高分句型二）
Hardly had we got off the coach when we were surrounded by the vendors，whom we could hardly get rid of，trying their best to sell their goods．（高分句型三）
I think，for example，more workers should be arranged to solve the problems of disorderly parking，and perhaps selling tickets online in advance is a good way to avoid the park being too crowded．（高分句型四）

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
       I am writing to you to make a complaint．This Dragon Boat Festival holiday I，as well as my family with great expectations of relaxing and enjoying ourselves，paid a visit to the famous tourist attraction，Tianlongshan National Forest Park．（高分句型一）However，I felt very disappointed at what I had experienced there．
       As we got closer to the park，we found it more difficult for us to move forward，as many drivers parked their cars where they shouldn't park and cyclists put their bikes wherever they could，which badly blocked the way to the park．（高分句型二）Hardly had we got off the coach when we were surrounded by the vendors，whom we could hardly get rid of，trying their best to sell their goods．（高分句型三）To my relief，we finally managed to reach the forest area，and the fresh air and beautiful scenery there made me intoxicated．But the rubbish，such as fruit skins，food packages and plastic bags thrown here and there by tourists spoiled the view and my good mood．What's worse，the toilets are dirty and stinky．Apart from that，too many people and confusing road signs exhausted me and my patience．
      Needless to say，it's time to take actions immediately to improve the unsatisfying conditions．I think，for example，more workers should be arranged to solve the problems of disorderly parking，and perhaps selling tickets online in advance is a good way to avoid the park being too crowded．（高分句型四）I hope in the near future the National Forest Park will become true to its name．I look forward to your reply．
       Thank you for your consideration．
                                                                                                                                                                                         Sincerely yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                  Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．