Question

為了減少食物浪費(fèi) ，中國(guó)最近開(kāi)展了“光盤(pán)行動(dòng)”。假如你是某校的學(xué)生李華，請(qǐng)以“Against Food Waste”為問(wèn)題，寫(xiě)一篇120字左右短文，擬發(fā)表在學(xué)校網(wǎng)站英文版上。內(nèi)容包括如下 ：
就餐浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象描述：據(jù)報(bào)道，每年全國(guó)在餐館被倒掉的食物估計(jì)可養(yǎng)活2億人
就餐浪費(fèi)的原因
提出你的倡議
注意：陳述要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡(jiǎn)單翻譯。

Answer 1

China has launched a national campaign "Eat up All on the Plates" . for the leftovers in restaurants across the country are almost enough to feed 200 million people annually, according to reports.
It is a tradition for most people in China to entertain their quests with more than enough food, believing that they have not satisfied their guests if there's no food left on the table, which they think is a good way to show their hospitality. They think they will be looked down upon if they don't do that.
The "Eat Up All on the Plates" campaign is intended to reduce the waste and raise people's awareness. As middle school students, we should do our bit to say "No" to food waste, and try to develop the habit of never ordering or cooking more than what we need so as to save our limited food resources, on which we depend for a better life.

試題分析：本文是一篇提綱作文。題干所給文字內(nèi)容較多，但實(shí)際上所給的明確要點(diǎn)卻不多，因此本篇作文的開(kāi)放程度還是比較大的。因而寫(xiě)好本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)首先的任務(wù)就是盤(pán)點(diǎn)一下要點(diǎn)：除了“就餐浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象描述：據(jù)報(bào)道，每年全國(guó)在餐館里被倒掉的食物估計(jì)可養(yǎng)活2億人”這一明確的要點(diǎn)和題干中所給出的句子外，其余要點(diǎn)都需要考生自己設(shè)想。因此為了表達(dá)時(shí)能夠做到心中有數(shù)，我們不妨可以簡(jiǎn)單地羅列一下要點(diǎn)：就餐浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的原因(中國(guó)人熱情；部分人要面子，講排場(chǎng))；光盤(pán)行動(dòng)的意義(節(jié)約糧食，提高意識(shí))；看法(大力提倡推廣，意義重大)。其次的任務(wù)就是需要用正確的英語(yǔ)把要點(diǎn)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)出來(lái)。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式。同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文用一句話就把“就餐浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象”描述得恰到好處。范文最大的特點(diǎn)就是長(zhǎng)句的使用。例如：“It is a tradition for most people in China to entertain their guests with more than enough food, believing that they have not satisfied their guests if there’s no food left on the table, which they think is a good way to show their hospitality.”就是一句話，卻達(dá)到45字。該句由“1個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句、3個(gè)復(fù)合句(涉及到賓語(yǔ)從句，條件狀語(yǔ)從句和非限制性定語(yǔ)從句)”組成。再如：“As middle school students, we should do our bit to say “No” to food waste, and try to develop the habit of never ordering or cooking more than what we need so as to save our limited food resources, on which we depend for a better life.”也是一句話，卻達(dá)到47字。該句由“1個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句、2個(gè)復(fù)合句(涉及到賓語(yǔ)從句和非限制性定語(yǔ)從句)”組成。長(zhǎng)句的使用充分展示了作者駕馭句式的能力。范文詞匯的使用也是亮點(diǎn)紛呈，“annually, to entertain their guests，looked down upon，is intended to reduce the waste，do our bit，develop the habit of，so as to save our limited food resources”等等詞匯的使用充分說(shuō)明了這一點(diǎn)。