Question

17．書面表達(dá)
留意一下我們的周邊，可以發(fā)現(xiàn)陪讀現(xiàn)象蔚然成風(fēng)．請你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)寫一篇短文，內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括：
（1）簡要描述陪讀現(xiàn)象；
（2）分析父母陪讀的原因（2至3個）；
（3）發(fā)表你對此的看法．
注意：（1）短文必須寫在指定區(qū)域．
      （2）詞數(shù)100左右．
      （3）內(nèi)容充實(shí)，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，語意連貫．
      （4）書寫需清晰、工整．
Should our parents accompany us in studying at school？

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息寫一篇短文，寫作時注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點(diǎn)：（1）簡要描述陪讀現(xiàn)象；（2）分析父母陪讀的原因（2至3個）；（3）發(fā)表你對此的看法．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：文章運(yùn)用了非限制性定語從句which will cause them not to develop the ability of selfcontrol in the future．
和who consider it necessary to offer a better living condition to the kids；主語從句what they've ignored is that it will get their kids into the habit of being dependent；so as to，keep track of，in order to等詞匯及meanwhile，Nevertheless，so等連接詞．

解答 Should our parents accompany us in studying at school？
    In recent years，many parents choose to accompany their children in studying，which has aroused a wide concern．（高分句型一）
    These parents are willing to leave their hometowns，even quit their jobs to follow their children into the campus．Most of them，who consider it necessary to offer a better living condition to the kids，rent an apartment nearby so as to take good care of their children．（高分句型二）Meanwhile，it can allow them to keep track of the kids'academic performance．
    Nevertheless，what they've ignored is that it will get their kids into the habit of being dependent，which will cause them not to develop the ability of selfcontrol in the future．（高分句型三）
    Trust leads to independence．So it seems to me that parents should leave room for children's growth and study，in order to ensure their overall development．

點(diǎn)評 寫作對于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力．在完成開放性作文時，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時要賦予變化，因?yàn)檫@樣你才可以更好的駕馭．同時也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個要點(diǎn)組織成一個完整的整體，如besides，further，last but not least等．在發(fā)表個人觀點(diǎn)的時候，可以使用諺語來提升整個文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性．