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14．現(xiàn)在，很多中學(xué)生每天長(zhǎng)時(shí)間用耳機(jī)聽音樂、學(xué)英語．你的英語筆友李平也是如此．最近他在來信中提到感覺頭痛、注意力不集中、記憶力減退．請(qǐng)你就此回信談?wù)勀愕挠^點(diǎn)和建議．
寫作要點(diǎn)：
    1．簡(jiǎn)述過度使用耳機(jī)的現(xiàn)象；
    2．分析過度使用耳機(jī)的危害；（至少兩點(diǎn)）
    3．提出你的建議．（至少兩條）
注意：
    1．要點(diǎn)齊全，可適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
    2．字?jǐn)?shù)120左右．開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
    3．可能用到的詞匯：
過度使用耳機(jī)overuse earphone；  注意力不集中l(wèi)ess concentration；  記憶力減退bad memory
Dear Li Ping，
I received your letter yesterday
 ____________________________________________________________________      
Best wishes．
                                                                     Lin Tao．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息現(xiàn)在，很多中學(xué)生每天長(zhǎng)時(shí)間用耳機(jī)聽音樂、學(xué)英語．你的英語筆友李平也是如此．最近他在來信中提到感覺頭痛、注意力不集中、記憶力減退．請(qǐng)你就此回信談?wù)勀愕挠^點(diǎn)和建議，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：簡(jiǎn)述過度使用耳機(jī)的現(xiàn)象；分析過度使用耳機(jī)的危害；（至少兩點(diǎn)）提出你的建議．（至少兩條）2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：spend too much time doing…花費(fèi)太多時(shí)間做某事；result in 導(dǎo)致；concentration on 集中注意力于…；for instance 例如
 As for your trouble with ears and bad memory，I'm afraid you spend too much time listening with earphones．（高分句型一）
In fact，listening to music while doing your lessons may result in less concentration on your study．（高分句型二）
However，if you do need to use an earphone，you should rest your ears for at least ten minutes every hour but do not use it more than 2 hours a day．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Li Ping，
      I received your letter yesterday．Nowadays many students listen to music and learn English with earphones．
      As for your trouble with ears and bad memory，I'm afraid you spend too much time listening with earphones．（高分句型一）In fact，listening to music while doing your lessons may result in less concentration on your study．（高分句型二）Besides，the overuse of earphones does harm to your hearing．
     There are many ways we can enjoy music and learn English．For instance，a recorder or a radio may be a good choice．However，if you do need to use an earphone，you should rest your ears for at least ten minutes every hour but do not use it more than 2 hours a day．（高分句型三）I hope things will get better soon．
                                                                                                                                                                                             Best wishes．
                                                                                                                                                                                                Lin Tao

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．