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5．假設(shè)你叫李華，現(xiàn)是武漢大學(xué)的一名新生．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示，給你中學(xué)的英語(yǔ)老師李老師寫一封感謝信，表達(dá)對(duì)他的感謝．詞數(shù)100左右．
提示：
1．對(duì)英語(yǔ)李老師表達(dá)感謝．
2．回顧在校時(shí)考試的壓力、堆積如山的作業(yè)和父母的高期望讓你很沮喪，多虧老師的鼓勵(lì)和耐心指導(dǎo)，讓你成績(jī)提高，終于實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想．
3．希望老師的學(xué)生都能進(jìn)入理想大學(xué)．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設(shè)你叫李華，現(xiàn)是武漢大學(xué)的一名新生．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示，給你中學(xué)的英語(yǔ)老師李老師寫一封感謝信，表達(dá)對(duì)他的感謝，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：對(duì)英語(yǔ)李老師表達(dá)感謝．回顧在校時(shí)考試的壓力、堆積如山的作業(yè)和父母的高期望讓你很沮喪，多虧老師的鼓勵(lì)和耐心指導(dǎo)，讓你成績(jī)提高，終于實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想．希望老師的學(xué)生都能進(jìn)入理想大學(xué)2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章結(jié)構(gòu)合理，語(yǔ)言流暢地道．全文沒有中國(guó)式英語(yǔ)思維，體現(xiàn)出考生很好的駕馭英語(yǔ)的能力．文章層層推進(jìn)，有理有據(jù)，情感真摯．語(yǔ)法方面：定語(yǔ)從句…，which I have been dreaming about；虛擬語(yǔ)氣If it had not been for your help，I might not have been admitted by my dream school…這些語(yǔ)法知識(shí)運(yùn)用嫻熟，顯示了較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)法功底，作文句式變得多樣，表達(dá)更有條理；短語(yǔ)和搭配方面：范文使用了make progress、be admitted by…短語(yǔ)和搭配，使作文的內(nèi)容變得充實(shí)．I am now a freshman of Wuhan University，which I have been dreaming about．（高分句型一）
If it had not been for your help，I might not have been admitted by my dream school．（高分句型二）
At that time，the pressure of examinations，too much homework and the high expectations from my parents made me depressed．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr Li，
       I'm very excited to write this letter to express my gratitude to you．I am now a freshman of Wuhan University，which I have been dreaming about．（高分句型一）If it had not been for your help，I might not have been admitted by my dream school．（高分句型二）
       Mr Li，I still remember the days when you taught me English．At that time，the pressure of examinations，too much homework and the high expectations from my parents made me depressed．（高分句型三）Thanks for your encouragement and guidance，I made progress and achieved my dream finally．
       I wish more and more of your students could go to their ideal colleges．Thank you for your help and support again and wish you all the best!
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．