Question

假設(shè)你是李雷，想尋找一位練羽毛球的球友，請(qǐng)你用英文在校內(nèi)網(wǎng)站上寫(xiě)一個(gè)廣告。
內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：
◇ 簡(jiǎn)介自己，特別是打球的水平（如球齡、成績(jī)等）；
◇對(duì)球友的要求（與自己水平相當(dāng)；周末有空閑等）；
◇給出聯(lián)系方式（電話(huà)56221342；郵箱：luckylilei@hotmail.com）。
注意：
1. 詞數(shù)不少于100；
2. 標(biāo)題已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
3. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使內(nèi)容充實(shí)、行文連貫。
參考詞匯：羽毛球 badminton
A Badminton Partner Wanted
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Answer 1

One possible version：
I’m looking for a badminton partner who can play with me on a regular basis.
My name is Li Lei, a sixteen-year-old boy who is crazy about the charming sport and has played badminton for about 4 years. I have taken part in several badminton games held by our city government and won the championship twice. Now I want to find a suitable partner who has the same level as me to play badminton together. Anybody who is good at playing badminton and has enough time on weekends can get in touch with me through the following ways.
Please dial my telephone number 56221342 or mail me at luckylilei@hotmail.com. Then we can discuss some details such as when and where we are going to play badminton together.
I am looking forward to your contact.

試題分析：本篇短文要求寫(xiě)一份廣告，屬于實(shí)用文寫(xiě)作范疇。根據(jù)提示可以得到以下要點(diǎn)：自我介紹；對(duì)球友的要求；聯(lián)系方式。從要點(diǎn)分析短文可以使用三個(gè)段落來(lái)進(jìn)行布局，首先提出自己做廣告的目的，然后介紹自己和自己的要求，最后寫(xiě)明自己的聯(lián)系方式以及表達(dá)自己的殷切盼望之情。在語(yǔ)言方面，應(yīng)該禮貌誠(chéng)懇，自然流暢。在時(shí)態(tài)方面，文章應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，而且還要適當(dāng)發(fā)揮想象，通過(guò)增加連接詞來(lái)有效達(dá)到層次清晰，內(nèi)容連貫的目的。此外，寫(xiě)作時(shí)還應(yīng)注意用多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)。參考詞匯：羽毛球 badminton。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇文章要點(diǎn)全面，層次清晰，內(nèi)容充實(shí)、行文連貫，而且最大亮點(diǎn)就是長(zhǎng)句的使用，這充分展示了作者駕馭句式的能力。在結(jié)構(gòu)布局方面，作者開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山提出廣告的目的，然后用一句含有同位語(yǔ)和定語(yǔ)從句的長(zhǎng)句My name is Li Lei, a sixteen-year-old boy who is crazy about the charming sport and has played badminton for about 4 years.對(duì)自己進(jìn)行了簡(jiǎn)單介紹，接著在下文又連續(xù)使用了幾個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句，比如Anybody who is good at playing badminton and has enough time on weekends can get in touch with me through the following ways.等表達(dá)了文章的所有要點(diǎn)，很好的完成了寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。