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11．假設你是紅星中學高一學生李華．你的英國筆友Jim在給你的郵件中提到他很想了解你上次外出旅行的情況，請你給Jim回信，內容包括：1．旅行目的地及時間；2．選擇該地點的原因；3．旅行中的收獲．
注意：1．詞數(shù)不少于50；2．開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Jim，
It is great to hear from you．I'm writing to share my last travel experience with you．
After discussing where to go during the May Day break，my parents and I went to Xi'an．We chose Xi'an for the followingreasons．（高分句型一）As is known to all，serving as the capital city of 13 dynasties，Xi'anis often calledthe birthplace of Chinese civilization．（高分句型二）Both my parents and I are interested in Chinese history，so the historical sites in Xi'an like the Terra Cotta Warriors and the ancient city walls were at the top of my family's travel list．Also，I'm doing a project about the Silk Road．The visit to Xi'an certainly benefited my research and deepened my understanding about the importance of the trade routes．
During our stay in Xi'an，not only did I appreciate the city's long history and rich culture，but visiting Xi'an made me feel very proud to be Chinese．（高分句型三）
How about your last travel？Looking forward to your reply．
Best wishes，Yours，LiHua

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息設你是紅星中學高一學生李華．你的英國筆友Jim在給你的郵件中提到他很想了解你上次外出旅行的情況，請你給Jim回信，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：旅行目的地及時間；選擇該地點的原因；旅行中的收獲． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：hear from收到某人的信息；As is known to all眾所周知；serve as 充當，擔任；be interested in對…感興趣；not only，but （also）不僅，而且；Look forward to盼望；
After discussing where to go during the May Day break，my parents and I went to Xi'an．We chose Xi'an for the following reasons．（高分句型一）
As is known to all，serving as the capital city of 13 dynasties，Xi'an is often called the birthplace of Chinese civilization．（高分句型二）
During our stay in Xi'an，not only did I appreciate the city's long history and rich culture，but visiting Xi'an made me feel very proud to be Chinese．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Jim，
      It is great to hear from you．I'm writing to share my last travel experience with you．
      After discussing where to go during the May Day break，my parents and I went to Xi'an．We chose Xi'an for the following reasons．（高分句型一）As is known to all，serving as the capital city of 13 dynasties，Xi'an is often called the birthplace of Chinese civilization．（高分句型二）Both my parents and I are interested in Chinese history，so the historical sites in Xi'an like the Terra Cotta Warriors and the ancient city walls were at the top of my family's travel list．Also，I'm doing a project about the Silk Road．The visit to Xi'an certainly benefited my research and deepened my understanding about the importance of the trade routes．
      During our stay in Xi'an，not only did I appreciate the city's long history and rich culture，but visiting Xi'an made me feel very proud to be Chinese．（高分句型三）
      How about your last travel？Looking forward to your reply．
      Best wishes，
Yours，
Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．