Question

【題目】假設(shè)你正在參加全省中學(xué)生演講比賽，請(qǐng)你針對(duì)有些父母經(jīng)常翻開(kāi)孩子的日記或書(shū)包這一現(xiàn)象，寫(xiě)一篇演講稿，陳述你的觀點(diǎn)。 內(nèi)容包括：1.認(rèn)為同學(xué)們不必為此煩惱 2.希望能夠體諒父母的苦衷 3.建議與父母進(jìn)行交流溝通

Good morning , ladies and gentlemen ,

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Answer 1

【答案】Good morning , ladies and gentlemen ,

Some of us are having problems with our parents , as they often look into our school bags or read our diaries . I fully understand why we are not comfortable about it , but there’s no need to feel too sad. Our parents are checking our bags or diaries to make sure we are not getting into any trouble . They have probably heard some horrible stories about other kids and thought we might do the same . Or perhaps they just want to connect with us but are doing it all wrong . My suggestion is : Tell them we want them to trust us as much as we’d like to trust them .If you don’t think you can talk to them , write them a letter and leave it lying around ---they are bound to read it

【解析】此文為演講稿。注意演講稿的格式和措辭。

寫(xiě)作步驟：

第一步：審題，抓要點(diǎn)。

要點(diǎn)有：1. 有些父母經(jīng)常翻開(kāi)孩子的日記或書(shū)包這一現(xiàn)象，2.認(rèn)為同學(xué)們不必為此煩惱3.希望能夠體諒父母的苦衷 3.建議與父母進(jìn)行交流溝通

第二步：人稱(chēng)：第一人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)

第三步：列提綱，起草

亮點(diǎn)分析：

多處使用復(fù)合句： Some of us are having problems with our parents , as they often look into our school bags or read our diaries .（原因狀語(yǔ)從句）

Our parents are checking our bags or diaries to make sure we are not getting into any trouble . （賓語(yǔ)從句）

They have probably heard some horrible stories about other kids and thought we might do the same .（賓語(yǔ)從句）

If you don’t think you can talk to them , write them a letter and leave it lying around ---they are bound to read it（條件狀語(yǔ)從句）

2.使用連詞，使文章更連貫。如as， but，and等。