Question

20．假設(shè)你曾是一名失學(xué)兒童，名叫李華，你有幸得到在中國工作的Peter先生的資助得以重返校園．你給Peter先生寫一封感謝信，內(nèi)容如下：
（1）收到錢和書后重返校園，非常感激．
（2）在老師的幫助和鼓勵(lì)下學(xué)習(xí)有了很大的進(jìn)步，決定更加努力，未來要向Peter先生學(xué)習(xí)．
（3）再次表達(dá)感謝并盼望見到Peter先生．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．倌的開頭和落款已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Mr．Peter，
I often think of you．How have you been recently？I'm Li Hua．I am writing to express my deepest gratitude for the money and books you sent me．I could not have returned to school without your help．Thank you so much．
I have been working hard since I went back to school and great progress has been made in my studies with the help of my teachers who often encourage me．（高分句型一）But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress so as to bea great person asyou．
I would like to meet you in person，but I haven't got an opportunity．Grateful for your generous help，I am looking forward to seeing you．（高分句型三）Hope you getting on with your life and work．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設(shè)你曾是一名失學(xué)兒童，名叫李華，你有幸得到在中國工作的Peter先生的資助得以重返校園．你給Peter先生寫一封感謝信，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：（1）收到錢和書后重返校園，非常感激．（2）在老師的幫助和鼓勵(lì)下學(xué)習(xí)有了很大的進(jìn)步，決定更加努力，未來要向Peter先生學(xué)習(xí)．（3）再次表達(dá)感謝并盼望見到Peter先生 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：express my deepest gratitude表達(dá)我深深的感激； with the help of 在…的幫助之下；But for your help要不是你的幫助；make up my mind to 下定決心去做某事；look forward to盼望；
I have been working hard since I went back to school and great progress has been made in my studies with the help of my teachers who often encourage me．（高分句型一）
But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）
Grateful for your generous help，I am looking forward to seeing you．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr．Peter，
      I often think of you．How have you been recently？I'm Li Hua．I am writing to express my deepest gratitude for the money and books you sent me．I could not have returned to school without your help．Thank you so much．
      I have been working hard since I went back to school and great progress has been made in my studies with the help of my teachers who often encourage me．（高分句型一）But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress so as to be a great person as you．
      I would like to meet you in person，but I haven't got an opportunity．Grateful for your generous help，I am looking forward to seeing you．（高分句型三）Hope you getting on with your life and work．
                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours Sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                Li Hua

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．