Question

16．假定你是劉洋，瀏覽了去年曾在你校擔(dān)任外教的Brown先生的博客，獲悉他在騎自行車時(shí)不慎摔倒，右手骨折，你很掛念他．請(qǐng)依據(jù)以下內(nèi)容給他寫一封信，要點(diǎn)如下：
1．慰問(wèn)他的傷情；  
2．舉例匯報(bào)自己在英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)方面取得的進(jìn)步； 
3．對(duì)他曾經(jīng)的教學(xué)印象深刻，獲益匪淺；希望他明年暑假再來(lái)山東．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右； 
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
3．開(kāi)頭及結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Brown，
How worried I am to hear the news that you had your right hand broken while riding a bike．
                                                                                 
                                                                                 
                                                                                 

Sincerely yours，
  Liu Yang．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于英文書信，根據(jù)提示信息慰問(wèn)一下外教的Brown先生．寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：慰問(wèn)他的傷情；舉例匯報(bào)自己在英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)方面取得的進(jìn)步；對(duì)他曾經(jīng)的教學(xué)印象深刻，獲益匪淺；希望他明年暑假再來(lái)山東．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：1．be anxious to do sth．急于做某事2．feel beter  身體感到好轉(zhuǎn)3．Thanks to  多虧4．make great progress  做出巨大的進(jìn)步5．be afraid of  害怕做某事6．in public  在公眾場(chǎng)合7．in and after class  課內(nèi)課外8．because of  由于9．up to now  到目前為止10．look forward to  期待

解答 Dear Brown，
   How worried I am to hear the news that you had your right hand broken while riding a bike．I'm anxious to know more about your injury，wondering whether you are feeling any better now．（高分句型）
    Thanks to your help I have made great progress in my English learning，especially in spoken English．（高分句型）I was afraid of speaking English in public before，but now I can express myself freely both in and after class．That's all because of your encouragement and help．
    Up to now，I still have been impressed with your interesting and attractive English classes and I really benefited a lot．（高分句型）
   Looking forward to your coming to Shandong again next summer and expecting you to recover as soon as possible!（高分句型）
  Sincely yours，
   LiuYang

點(diǎn)評(píng) 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計(jì)好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時(shí)態(tài)、人稱等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來(lái)，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯(cuò)誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯(cuò)，注意時(shí)態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．