Question

【題目】假定你是李華，你校將組織在校師生本周六去游樂場(chǎng)（amusement park）游玩。請(qǐng)寫封郵件邀請(qǐng)外教Bryan同去，內(nèi)容包括：

1.出發(fā)時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)；

2.游玩的項(xiàng)目（劃船、騎車、喂魚等）；

3.表達(dá)期待。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3.開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Bryan,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Bryan,

I have good news for you. Our school is going to organize a trip to an amusement park this Saturday. It’s my great pleasure to invite you to come along. We will set off at the school gate at eight a.m. this Saturday. We are requested to wait there in advance.

There are many interesting events in this trip. We can try some sporting events, such as rowing, cycling and riding roller coasters. Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices for us, which can make us get closer to nature.

I’m looking forward to your arrival and hope we can have fun together.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文, 寫一封邀請(qǐng)信。

第一步：

審題: 邀請(qǐng)信

人稱：第一、三人稱

時(shí)態(tài)： 一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)、一般將來時(shí)

結(jié)構(gòu)： 總分法，分三部分，第一部分說明寫信原因，第二部分說明活動(dòng)安排，

第三部分表達(dá)期待。

要點(diǎn)：

1.說明寫信原因：邀請(qǐng)外教Bryan本周六去游樂場(chǎng)游玩

2．具體的活動(dòng)安排

①出發(fā)時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)：本周六上午8點(diǎn)學(xué)校門口集合

②游玩項(xiàng)目安排：劃船、騎車、乘坐過山車、賞花、喂魚

3．期待Byran的到來 ，希望玩得高興

第二步：列提綱（重點(diǎn)詞匯、短語 ）

organize a trip；pleasure； invite sb. to；set off； request sb. to do …；in advance；interesting；sporting event；such as；appreciate；make sb.do …； get close to nature；arrival； have fun

第三步：連詞成句

(1)Our school is going to organize a trip to an amusement park.

(2)It’s my great pleasure to invite you to come along.

(3)We will set off at the school gate at eight a.m. this Saturday.

(4)We are requested to wait there in advance.

(5)There are many interesting events in this trip. We can try some sporting events, such as rowing, cycling and riding roller coasters.

(6)Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices.

(7)It can make us get closer to nature.

根據(jù)提示和關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行遣詞造句,適當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用句型，注意時(shí)態(tài)和主謂一致問題。

第四步：連句成篇(銜接詞、亮點(diǎn)詞匯)

用多種方式表達(dá)“學(xué)校將要組織去游樂場(chǎng)游玩”

(1)Our school is going to organize a trip to an amusement park.

→Our school will organize a trip to an amusement park.

→Our school is to organize a trip to an amusement park.

→Our school is scheduled to organize a trip to an amusement park.

用it 做形式主語表達(dá)下面的句子

(6)Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices.

→It will be good choices to appreciate some rare flowers in the winter and feed the fish in the pond.

用定語從句連接下面兩個(gè)句子

(6)Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices.

(7)It can make us get closer to nature.

→Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices,which can make us get closer to nature.

適當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯、多變句式提升文章的檔次 ，增加文章的可讀性。