Question

 請(qǐng)以“One person I’m grateful to”為題，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇100—120個(gè)詞的短文，記述一個(gè)你認(rèn)為值得感謝的人。要求如下：

1. 內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例;

2. 簡(jiǎn)要說(shuō)明值得感謝的原因或從中得到的啟示；

3. 文中不得透漏個(gè)人信息。

注意：文章的標(biāo)題已給出（不計(jì)詞數(shù)）。

One Person I’m Grateful to

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

We are supposed to be grateful to people who are always there with us because they are the charming gardeners who make our souls blossom.

My English teacher is such a great soul, to whom I owe many thanks. During the previous study, my biggest flaw must come to carelessness, which worried me a lot. To make matters worse, I was too anxious to seek the fundamental reason for my failure. I just dedicated myself to huge amounts of practice, regardless of repeated mistakes. Fortunately, my teacher noticed it and offered to have a long talk with me. Having been persuaded to change my attitude, I finally got the right way to rid myself of carelessness and gained confidence as well.

I am grateful to my English teacher for all the support he has given me, which has made me stronger and a better person.

【解析】

試題分析：本文主語(yǔ)開放性的作文，話題是“One person I’m grateful to”。這個(gè)人可以是現(xiàn)實(shí)中的人也可以是文學(xué)作品中某個(gè)人物。考生可以敘述身邊人物的具體事例來(lái)說(shuō)明自己感激的人的具體品質(zhì)。在范文中，作者選擇了自己的英語(yǔ)老師為例。在完成開放性作文時(shí)，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語(yǔ)或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，因?yàn)檫@樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。在發(fā)表個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，可以使用諺語(yǔ)來(lái)提升整個(gè)文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文最大的亮點(diǎn)在于高級(jí)詞匯的使用，如be supposed to do sth應(yīng)該做某事； dedicate oneself to….專心于…；regardless of不管，不顧…；gain confidence贏得自信；高級(jí)句式的使用也較為頻繁，如which worried me a lot.中的which引導(dǎo)的是非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。以及Having been persuaded to change my attitude, I finally got the right way to rid myself of carelessness and gained confidence as well.中的非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞having been persuaded…用法。

考點(diǎn)：考察開放性作文