Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是某中學(xué)學(xué)生李華。請你根據(jù)以下提示寫一封信給校長。

【寫作內(nèi)容】

幾天前，學(xué)校領(lǐng)導(dǎo)和教師因?yàn)閾?dān)心同學(xué)們?yōu)g覽不健康的網(wǎng)站，關(guān)閉了教室內(nèi)的網(wǎng)絡(luò)瀏覽功能，你們感到很難過。你想勸校長重新開通教室內(nèi)的網(wǎng)絡(luò)。原因如下：

1．有利于查找資料；

2．瀏覽新聞,了解信息；

3．作為高中生，我們正在形成自己的判斷能力（judging ability）

【寫作要求】

1.信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容連貫；

3.100詞左右。

Dear headmaster，

I am writing to you to apply to reopen the Internet in the classroom.________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Best regards！

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear headmaster，

I am writing to you to apply to reopen the Internet in the classroom. Days before, the leaders and teachers were afraid that students may get over the unhealthy website, and then cut off the Internet connection in the classroom, which made us feel very sad.

As the information exchange is becoming more and more important in this high technique society, we really need the internet connection. Firstly, there is huge information in the internet, which can do great favor for us to find as reference. Secondly, we can read the news and get more understanding with the current events. The last but not the least, as senior students, we have already formed our own judging ability, and we can pick out which is bad for our health.

Dear headmaster, we really need the information, we are looking forward to your reply soon.

Best regards！

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：試題為應(yīng)用文中的書信寫作，寫好此文，需注意三點(diǎn)：一是寫信格式要準(zhǔn)確，信的開頭已經(jīng)給出，但切要寫好信的結(jié)尾。二是要詳略得當(dāng)，本文應(yīng)重點(diǎn)寫的是勸校長重新開通教室內(nèi)的網(wǎng)絡(luò)。原因如下：1．有利于查找資料；2．瀏覽新聞,了解信息；3．作為高中生，我們正在形成自己的判斷能力（judging ability）三要注意適當(dāng)?shù)卦黾蛹?xì)節(jié)，恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂眠B接過渡詞，以使行文連貫。另外，在寫作時(shí)要注意時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)的合理運(yùn)用。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】

本文是一封書信，格式正確，內(nèi)容齊全，句子銜接緊密，結(jié)構(gòu)布局合理，同時(shí)文章使用高級句子。the leaders and teachers were afraid that students may get over the unhealthy website,句中使用賓語從句；then cut off the Internet connection in the classroom, which made us feel very sad.which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句；As the information exchange is becoming more and more important in this high technique society, we really need the internet connection.as引導(dǎo)原因狀語從句；另外，F(xiàn)irstly, Secondly, The last but not the least,等的運(yùn)用為文章增色添彩。