Question

【題目】假如你是松松，請就本校食堂服務(wù)（canteen service）的狀況給勇哥寫一封信。內(nèi)容包括：

優(yōu)點	不足	建議
食堂干凈	價格偏高	？
飯菜可口	各類偏少
服務(wù)態(tài)度好	等候時間較長

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 開頭語和結(jié)束語已為你寫好。

Dear Yong Ge,

I am a senior student of our school. I’d like to say something about the canteen service in our school. __________________________________________________

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Yong Ge,

I am a senior student of our school. I'd like to say something about the canteen service in our school. In general, the service is satisfactory. The hall is clean and tidy. The dishes look inviting and taste delicious as

well. What's more, the workers there treat us as their friends, which makes us feel very happy.

However, we feel the price of the meals is a little too high. Besides, we can only have a limited variety of dishes with little change every week. In addition, we often have to stand in line for a long time before we can get the meal. You could understand how precious time is to us students. Therefore, may I suggest something be done to solve the problems so that we can all enjoy our meals at school?

Thanks for your consideration.

Sincerely yours,

Sonson

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達屬于應(yīng)用文，內(nèi)容是寫一封書信說一下本校食堂服務(wù)。寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫。3、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。 4.注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點。

【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。比如the workers there treat us as their friends, which makes us feel very happy.為非限定定語從句。此外，文章還使用了大量短語would like to, talk about等短語。副詞what’s more的使用使文章內(nèi)容更具有層次感，也使語言更加連貫。