Question

【題目】Bullying isn’t just confined to the real world. According to the Cyberbullying Research Center, almost half of all young people have been bullied online. Cyberbullying is a form in which people harm other people online deliberately. And unlike the traditional bully, the electronic bully can remain anonymous, so we often don’t know who they are. Cyberbullying includes things like spreading lies and rumors online, sending or forwarding unpleasant message via instant messaging, text or on social networks. It’s becoming very common among teenagers these days. They are campaigns against cyberbullying and some places have adopted laws to prevent it.

Kate is a victim of cyberbully. It’s so bad that she doesn’t want to leave the house. Someone from school has put message on social media saying she’s ugly and she should die. It’s terrible.

【寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容】

1.用約30個(gè)單詞寫(xiě)出上下文概要；

2.用約120個(gè)單詞寫(xiě)作以下相關(guān)內(nèi)容：

（1）網(wǎng)絡(luò)暴力的原因和影響；

（2）從社會(huì)規(guī)范和個(gè)人行為談?wù)勅绾螒?yīng)對(duì)網(wǎng)絡(luò)暴力。

【寫(xiě)作要求】

1.發(fā)表觀點(diǎn)時(shí)必須提供理由或論據(jù)

2.闡述觀點(diǎn)、提供論據(jù)或敘述經(jīng)歷時(shí)，不能直接引用原文語(yǔ)句

3.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱

【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

【答案】Cyberbullying issue has been a hard nut to crack, which affects students’ daily life and even brings about psychological problems. The descriptions presented above are typical examples.

Quite a few factors give rise to the hot issue. To begin with, many media online expose children to negative information, especially concerning violence, which will be rooted in children’s heart and mislead them to bullying. Besides, inadequate parental education should also be responsible for their children’s ignorance of laws and indifference to others’ feelings. They will end up appealing to more simple but rude ways to serve their purpose. As a consequence, not only does it endanger children’s physical condition but also causes many mental problems.

From my point of view, there is no simple solution to cyberbullying. Most important of all is proper guidance and monitoring as well as moral education from both schools and parents. It’s only in this way that students can grow up healthily and we may build a harmonious society.

【解析】本文屬于讀寫(xiě)任務(wù)寫(xiě)作，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書(shū)面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個(gè)詞寫(xiě)一篇短文，按照要點(diǎn)去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏。

首先，概括的時(shí)候要注意語(yǔ)言的精煉性，要點(diǎn)要齊全。其次，闡述的理由或論據(jù)要簡(jiǎn)潔明了，層次分明。最后對(duì)自己的觀點(diǎn)作出總結(jié)。

寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，本文要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。上下文意思要連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，因此要使用一些連接詞或詞組。寫(xiě)作時(shí)盡量使用自己會(huì)的單詞、詞組和句型，同時(shí)也要注意使用一些高級(jí)語(yǔ)法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。

亮點(diǎn)：這篇范文要點(diǎn)全面，語(yǔ)言精煉，簡(jiǎn)單句和復(fù)雜句交叉使用，在文章中使用了大量的高級(jí)詞匯，語(yǔ)言優(yōu)美，條理清楚。開(kāi)篇使用一個(gè)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句簡(jiǎn)潔地總結(jié)了本文的要點(diǎn)，Cyberbullying issue has been a hard nut to crack, which affects students’ daily life and even brings about psychological problems。第二段開(kāi)頭使用固定短語(yǔ)give rise to 點(diǎn)出下文的理由。接著使用一些順序連詞（短語(yǔ)）如“To begin with… Besides, … As a consequence, …”把一整段的內(nèi)容有機(jī)地結(jié)合起來(lái)。

第二段中說(shuō)明理由時(shí)句型上也是多變，復(fù)合句與單句交替使用。先使用了定語(yǔ)從句：many media online expose children to negative information, especially concerning violence, which will be rooted in children’s heart and mislead them to bullying. To begin with,）又用了個(gè)單句（inadequate parental education should also be responsible for their children’s ignorance of laws and indifference to others’ feelings. They will end up appealing to more simple but rude ways to serve their purpose. （As a consequence, ）再用not only…but also句式（not only does it endanger children’s physical condition but also causes many mental problems.）完美地結(jié)束本段。

最后一段中使用一些詞組From my point of view, Most important of all, build a harmonious society連成一段。在最后一段中又使用了強(qiáng)調(diào)句式（It’s only in this way that students can grow up healthily and we may build a harmonious society.）結(jié)束全文。整個(gè)文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，一氣呵成。