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2．為了人民的健康，一些城市相繼在公共場所實施了禁煙，然而與之不協(xié)調(diào)的是，越來越多的青少年正在加入煙民的行列．請根據(jù)以下提示寫一篇短文，分析高中生吸煙現(xiàn)象，原因并呼吁高中生戒煙．
原因：1．認(rèn)為吸煙很酷；
2．父母吸煙，樹立了壞榜樣；
3．受影視作品中吸煙人物的影響．
呼吁：吸煙一點都不酷，馬上戒煙吧！
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
More and more teenagers are smoking nowadays．Why do they enjoy smoking？The reasons for that are as follows．
First，most young smokers think smoking is cool and does no harm right now．Feeling curious，they would like to try smoking themselves．（高分句型一）Besides，some parents often smoke not only at home but also in public places，setting bad examples to their children．（高分句型二）Last but not least，some actors are often seen smoking in movies as well as in TV plays．Influenced by these films and TV plays，some teenagers believe that smoking helps make them more attractive and morelike adults．（高分句型三）
How foolish!As a matter of fact，smoking is not cool at all．What's worse，it does great harm to our health．So give it up now!．

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分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息 為了人民的健康，一些城市相繼在公共場所實施了禁煙，然而與之不協(xié)調(diào)的是，越來越多的青少年正在加入煙民的行列．請根據(jù)以下提示寫一篇短文，分析高中生吸煙現(xiàn)象，原因并呼吁高中生戒煙，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：原因：認(rèn)為吸煙很酷；父母吸煙，樹立了壞榜樣；受影視作品中吸煙人物的影響．呼吁：吸煙一點都不酷，馬上戒煙吧！2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：First首先；Besides另外；Last but not least最后同樣最重要；not only    but also不僅，而且；As a matter of fact事實上；What's worse更糟的是；
Feeling curious，they would like to try smoking themselves．（高分句型一）
Besides，some parents often smoke not only at home but also in public places，setting bad examples to their children．（高分句型二）
Influenced by these films and TV plays，some teenagers believe that smoking helps make them more attractive and more like adults．（高分句型三）

解答 More and more teenagers are smoking nowadays．Why do they enjoy smoking？The reasons for that are as follows．
        First，most young smokers think smoking is cool and does no harm right now．Feeling curious，they would like to try smoking themselves．（高分句型一）Besides，some parents often smoke not only at home but also in public places，setting bad examples to their children．（高分句型二）Last but not least，some actors are often seen smoking in movies as well as in TV plays．Influenced by these films and TV plays，some teenagers believe that smoking helps make them more attractive and more like adults．（高分句型三）
       How foolish!As a matter of fact，smoking is not cool at all．What's worse，it does great harm to our health．So give it up now!

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