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【題目】書面表達(dá)

根據(jù)提示，寫一篇建議信。假如你是某報編輯，昨天收到學(xué)生李華的來信。請根據(jù)來信的內(nèi)容和所給的要點(diǎn)提示用英語寫一封回信。

寫作要點(diǎn): 1. 真誠地與父母交流自己的真實感受：自己長大了,能處理自己的事情。

2. 正確對待父母的愛：理解父母，感激父母的愛

3. ……（至少再寫一條自己的建議）

注意： 1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 開頭語已為你寫好。但不計入總詞數(shù)；

Dear Li Hua,

I have read your letter. It is good that you feel grateful for your parents’ love. __________________________________________________________________________________

__________________________________________________________________________________

__________________________________________________________________________________

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Li Hua,

I have read your letter. It is good that you feel grateful for your parents’ love. You know that most of teenagers at your age will experience the same worry with you. So don’t feel too worried and I’ll try to make some suggestions to help you.

First, I’d like to suggest that you should talk with your parents openly and politely, telling them you are old enough to deal with some of your own matters on your own. Also, you should understand your parents, appreciating them for their love, instead of refusing their help rudely. Finally, I think it would be a good idea that you try your best to do well in your study and other aspects. Only by doing this, will you let them know what you need is their belief and support .I believe your parents will finally understand you.

I hope you will find these ideas useful.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：考查開放性作文寫作,開放性作文給出了一個話題，并有部分的文字提示。給考生自由發(fā)揮的余地較大。對于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。在完成開放性作文時，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時要賦予變化，因為這樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個要點(diǎn)組織成一個完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。在發(fā)表個人觀點(diǎn)的時候，可以使用諺語來提升整個文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】文章使用了很好的短語和句子：the same with與..相同,feel grateful for感激,deal with解決,do well in做得好，on your own自己,instead of而不是,It is good that you feel grateful for your parents’ love形式主語.Only by doing this, will you let them know what you need is their belief and support倒裝句和賓語從句,文章使用First,Also,Finally等過渡性連接詞使文章更有條理性。