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11．目前，不少人在寫(xiě)作文或交流時(shí)喜歡使用網(wǎng)絡(luò)語(yǔ)言．就此現(xiàn)象，你班最近舉行了一場(chǎng)討論．請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表的提示，客觀地介紹討論的情況及你的觀點(diǎn)．

40%的同學(xué)認(rèn)為	60%的同學(xué)認(rèn)為	你的觀點(diǎn)
1．有點(diǎn)荒誕，有時(shí)讓人無(wú)法理解； 2．違背了漢語(yǔ)的語(yǔ)法規(guī)則，對(duì)學(xué)習(xí)毫無(wú)幫助．	1．幽默，使語(yǔ)言更生動(dòng)； 2．有助于表達(dá)思想．	1．…  2．…

注意：1．對(duì)所給提示，不要簡(jiǎn)單翻譯，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫；
2．詞數(shù)120左右．開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；    3．參考詞匯：荒誕的 ridiculous
With the development of the Internet，there has come a kind of language called Web Language．Recently，our class has held a discussion on whether it's good for students to use Web Language in writing compositions or communication．
                                              

Answer 1

分析 本題要求考生綜述討論情況、雙方觀點(diǎn)并闡明自己的觀點(diǎn)．全文應(yīng)使用現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．注意闡明自己觀點(diǎn)的部分不要與前文雙方觀點(diǎn)重復(fù)．雖然不可逐條翻譯，但是不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，否則影響得分．注意詞匯等表達(dá)手段的多樣化、避免句式單一．行文要連貫．用自己熟悉的語(yǔ)言，不要生編硬造，避免中式英語(yǔ)．
本文完成了題目規(guī)定的任務(wù)，要點(diǎn)齊全、層次清楚、行文連貫．用詞不落俗套．如用not in favor of而不是多數(shù)考生會(huì)用的against表示"反對(duì)"，用fond of代替for．在表達(dá)自己觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候更是直截了當(dāng)：I don't think it good to use Web Language．體現(xiàn)了表達(dá)的多樣性．
亮點(diǎn)句型一：40% of the students are not in favor of the idea of using Web Language，thinking it ridiculous to see or hear words which are not commonly used in our daily life．40%的學(xué)生不贊成使用網(wǎng)絡(luò)語(yǔ)言，認(rèn)為在日常生活中不常看到或聽(tīng)到的單詞是荒謬的．這是一個(gè)復(fù)雜句，其中thinking it…in our daily life是主句的伴隨狀語(yǔ)，在這個(gè)狀語(yǔ)中 which are not commonly used in our daily life引導(dǎo)的是定語(yǔ)從句修飾先行詞words．
亮點(diǎn)句型二：They think what they say will sound humorous，which makes the language more lively．他們認(rèn)為他們說(shuō)的話聽(tīng)起來(lái)幽默，這使得語(yǔ)言更加生動(dòng)．這是一個(gè)有主語(yǔ)從句和定語(yǔ)從句的句子．what they say will sound humorous是think的賓語(yǔ)從句，在這個(gè)賓語(yǔ)從句中what they say是主語(yǔ)從句；which makes the language more lively是一個(gè)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，which指代前面整個(gè)句子的內(nèi)容．

解答 With the development of the Internet，there has come a kind of language called Web Language．Recently，our class has held a discussion on whether it's good for students to use Web Language in writing compositions or communication．【闡明現(xiàn)象】
40% of the students are not in favor of the idea of using Web Language，thinking it ridiculous to see or hear words which are not commonly used in our daily life（亮點(diǎn)句型一）．Worse still，it's hard for them to make themselves understood．In their opinion，it is against Chinese grammar，and it's not beneficial to students'studies．
However，the rest of the students are fond of it．They think what they say will sound humorous，which makes the language more lively．Moreover，it is of special help for them to express themselves freely．【闡述同學(xué)們的觀點(diǎn)】
In my opinion，it is a phenomenon worth thinking about．I don't think it good to use Web Language．It may be fashionable as some think，but you may also make your idea confusing，leaving other people at a loss．（亮點(diǎn)句型二）【個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文屬于提綱作文，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題．平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫(xiě)作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．