Question

【題目】假如你是李華。你的朋友Tommy是一個手機低頭族，無論站著、坐著、走著，他都在低頭玩手機。請就此給Tommy寫一封信。

內(nèi)容包括：1．做手機低頭族的危害； 2．希望他改掉這個壞習(xí)慣。

注意：

1．詞數(shù)100左右；

2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3．開頭語和結(jié)尾語已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯：過度使用overuse

Dear Tommy,

There seems to be a trend that people now tend to play with their cell phones no matter where they are. And I know you are not an exception.

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tommy,

There seems to be trend that people now tend to play with their cell phones no matter where they are. And I know you are not an exception.

There is no doubt that cell phones play an important part in our daily life. However , being addicted to cell phones does a lot of harm to the owners. First, staring at a cell phone screen for hours on end can lead to dry eyes or other eye diseases. Second, if you always overuse your cell phone , your head as well as your neck will ache, which will have a bad effect on you. Besides, on your way home or to school , with your attention fully focused on the cell phone, perhaps , you will fail to notice the traffic around you, which will be a great danger to you.

Therefore, I sincerely wish you to give up your bad habit and use your cell phone wisely .

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇提綱類作文。根據(jù)要點：

文章內(nèi)容要點已經(jīng)給出�？忌�在寫這篇文章時，要注意以下幾點：

1.根據(jù)題干中所描述的Tommy是一個手機低頭族，無論站著、坐著、走著，他都在低頭玩手機。對此給Tommy寫一封信。寫信的內(nèi)容已經(jīng)提示了，a．做手機低頭族的危害；（至少兩點）b．希望他改掉這個壞習(xí)慣。但是不要對要點進(jìn)行簡單的羅列�？梢允褂眠m當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，使上下文行文流暢，銜接自然流程。同時注意時態(tài)和語態(tài)。

2.. 注意語氣。既然該文是以勸告朋友不要做低頭族為主題，所以要注意語氣應(yīng)該比較委婉。要注意書信的格式問題，言辭要誠懇。

【范文亮點】

1.文章采用了“There seems to be trend 似乎成為一種趨勢”“There is no doubt that毫無疑問”“play an important part in在…中扮演重要角色（起重要作用）”“have a bad effect on對…有不良影響”等高分句式。

2.文中運用了“tend to傾向于”“no matter where 無論在哪里”“ be addicted to 沉迷于”“ First,Second,Besides,以及Therefore等連接詞”“l(fā)ead to 導(dǎo)致”“as well as也”“focused on集中精力于”“fail to失敗于”“give up 放棄”等高級短語。