Question

19．假如你是李華．你的朋友Tommy是一個(gè)手機(jī)低頭族，無(wú)論站著、坐著、走著，他都在低頭玩手機(jī)．請(qǐng)就此給Tommy寫一封信．
內(nèi)容包括：
1．做手機(jī)低頭族的危害（過(guò)度使用手機(jī)會(huì)導(dǎo)致眼睛疾病或帶來(lái)其他健康問(wèn)題，給自身安全帶來(lái)隱患）；
2．希望他改掉這個(gè)壞習(xí)慣．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)和結(jié)尾語(yǔ)已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
參考詞匯：過(guò)度使用overuse
Dear Tommy，
There seems to be a trend that people now tend to play with their cell phones no matter where they are．And I know you are not an exception．
There is no doubt that cell phones play an important part in our daily life．（高分句型一）However，being addicted to cell phones does a lot of harm to the owners．First，staring at a cell phone screen for hours on end can lead to dry eyes or other eye diseases．Second，if you always overuse your cell phone，your hands as well as your neck will ache，which will have a bad effect on you．（高分句型二）Besides，on your way home or to school，with your attention fully focused on the cell phone，perhaps you will fail to notice the traffic around you，which will be a great danger to you．（高分句型三）
Therefore，I sincerely expect you to give up your bad habit and use your cell phone wisely．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假如你是李華．你的朋友Tommy是一個(gè)手機(jī)低頭族，無(wú)論站著、坐著、走著，他都在低頭玩手機(jī)．請(qǐng)就此給Tommy寫一封信．寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：做手機(jī)低頭族的危害（過(guò)度使用手機(jī)會(huì)導(dǎo)致眼睛疾病或帶來(lái)其他健康問(wèn)題，給自身安全帶來(lái)隱患）；希望他改掉這個(gè)壞習(xí)慣．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：tend to 傾向于；There is no doubt that…毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)；play an important part in 在…方面起重要作用；Besides另外；Therefore因此；give up放棄；
There is no doubt that cell phones play an important part in our daily life．（高分句型一）
Second，if you always overuse your cell phone，your hands as well as your neck will ache，which will have a bad effect on you．（高分句型二）
Besides，on your way home or to school，with your attention fully focused on the cell phone，perhaps you will fail to notice the traffic around you，which will be a great danger to you．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tommy，
      There seems to be a trend that people now tend to play with their cell phones no matter where they are．And I know you are not an exception．
      There is no doubt that cell phones play an important part in our daily life．（高分句型一）However，being addicted to cell phones does a lot of harm to the owners．First，staring at a cell phone screen for hours on end can lead to dry eyes or other eye diseases．Second，if you always overuse your cell phone，your hands as well as your neck will ache，which will have a bad effect on you．（高分句型二）Besides，on your way home or to school，with your attention fully focused on the cell phone，perhaps you will fail to notice the traffic around you，which will be a great danger to you．（高分句型三）
      Therefore，I sincerely expect you to give up your bad habit and use your cell phone wisely．
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．