Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華。請根據(jù)下面四幅圖的先后順序，寫一篇英文周記，記述你確定大學(xué)志愿的過程。

注意：詞數(shù)不少于60。

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Answer 1

【答案】The past week was by no means ordinary, for I had finally decided on my major.

This Monday, the topic was brought up again by my parents during dinner. I had asked myself the same question many times, but still couldn’t make up my mind. Seeing my hesitant look, mom patted me on my shoulder, her smile encouraging me to do more research.

Later that evening, I turned to the Internet for help. Faced with so many choices, I seemed to be lost. Law could be a good choice. Business and computer science were also attracting top students. I noted down one after another major, but crossed them all off, for what I wanted was a profession that could make a difference in people’s lives.

The inspiration came unexpectedly with the CCTV News yesterday. The moment “Role Models of Our Time” appeared on the screen, I was awed. The news story focused on superheroes without a cape — police officers, healthcare workers, delivery men, city cleaners — who guarded us and ensured our life ran normally. Suddenly, I realized my life’s purpose — relieving pain and saving lives. And to pursue this call, I decided to specialize in medical science.

I jumped excitedly at this idea. Mom and dad were also happy that I had found the compass for my future life, and said they would be so proud to see me in white. Now, determined to become a healthcare worker, whenever I start my schoolwork, I know I am studying for a noble cause.

【解析】

本篇書面表達屬于應(yīng)用文。要求考生根據(jù)所給的四幅圖寫一篇周記，記述自己確定大學(xué)志愿的過程。

第一步：審題

體裁：應(yīng)用文

時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般過去時

人稱：第一人稱為主

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分總法

總分總法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，結(jié)尾再重申一下自己的主題，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

要求：1. 挖掘四幅圖所給出的信息：圖1——和父母討論大學(xué)志愿選什么，圖2——自己網(wǎng)上查找大學(xué)志愿資料，圖3——看電視新聞給自己選大學(xué)志愿的啟發(fā)，圖4——確定了自己的大學(xué)志愿；

2. 自己確定大學(xué)志愿過程中的感悟。

第二步:列提綱（重點詞組）

by no means；make up one’s mind；encourage sb.to do sth.；turn to…for help；make a difference；focus on

第三步：連詞成句

1. The past week was by no means ordinary, for I had finally decided on my major.

2. I had asked myself the same question many times, but still couldn’t make up my mind.

3. Seeing my hesitant look, mom patted me on my shoulder, her smile encouraging me to do more research.

4. Later that evening, I turned to the Internet for help.

5. for what I wanted was a profession that could make a difference in people’s lives.

6. The news story focused on superheroes without a cape.

(根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。）

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列補充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause(從句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表換一種方式表達：In other words, that is to say,

6.表進行舉例說明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陳述事實：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表選擇：either…or…，or

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰。

第五步：潤色修改