Question

一家知名外資企業(yè)準(zhǔn)備與當(dāng)?shù)卣�府合作修建一所�?guó)際學(xué)校為了、建辦﹑好學(xué)校，該企業(yè)總裁Mr. White廣泛征求學(xué)生意見，并公開了他的郵地址。
請(qǐng)你以李華的名義給他寫一封E-mail，談?wù)勀愕慕ㄗh及理由。
內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：
1．學(xué)習(xí)環(huán)境 （如：教室，操場(chǎng)……）
2. 特色課程（如：網(wǎng)球，鋼琴……）
3. ……
要求：
1. 詞數(shù)100左右
2. 文中不能出現(xiàn)自己的姓名和學(xué)校的名稱。
3. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
Dear Mr. White,
I am glad to hear you will build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice. ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 
                                                                                            
    
I hope I can enter the school. 
Sincerely yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mr. White,
I am glad to hear you will build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice. I think the new school should be nice and pleasant. Students need bright classrooms to study and modern libraries to broaden their horizons and large playgrounds to play different kinds of sports on.
The school may provide students with some special courses, such as art, tennis or piano lessons. These courses can make students relax and encourage them to develop freely. It would be better for students to have some chances to practice in your company so that they get some useful experience.                                                  
I hope I can enter the school. 
Sincerely yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：這是一篇書信類作文，也是提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來. 動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)不夠具體,故需要考生發(fā)揮，準(zhǔn)確表達(dá).寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】Students need bright classrooms to study and modern libraries to broaden their horizons and large playgrounds to play different kinds of sports on. 這句話用了不定式做目的狀語， The school may provide students with some special courses, such as art, tennis or piano lessons. 這句話用了詞組：provide sb with sth“提供某人某物”，These courses can make students relax and encourage them to develop freely. 這句話用形容詞做賓語補(bǔ)足語和不定式做賓語補(bǔ)足語，It would be better for students to have some chances to practice in your company so that they get some useful experience.這句話用了it做形式主語，和so that句型。