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18．Eating snacks can be a good way to stop your hunger and get the vitamins your body needs．But as teenagers you need to pay attention to what you eat．Choosing healthy snacks means shopping smartly．Be careful of the health claims on food packages．Words on the package like"all natural"or"pure"don't always mean the food is good for you．Be careful of low-fat food claims，too．If the fat has been cut back，the amount of sugar in the food may have been increased to keep the food tasting good．Many low-fat foods have nearly as many calories as their full-fat versions．Here are some ways to make healthy snacking part of your everyday routine．
★Keep plenty of fresh fruit and vegetables at home，so you can take them with you when you go out．
★Satisfy your cravings with healthier foods．If you are crazy about chocolate，try a hot chocolate drink instead of a chocolate bar．If you want something salty，eat whole grain biscuits instead of potato chips．Besides，it is wise for you to replace ice-cream with yogurt．
★Pay attention to the amount you eat．As with everything，moderation（適度）is the key to smart snacking．
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1．用約30個(gè)單詞概述上述信息的主要內(nèi)容；
2．簡(jiǎn)述攝取過多脂肪和熱量的負(fù)面影響；
3．你對(duì)"零食控"的建議．
【寫作要求】
1．寫作過程中不能直接引用原文語句；
2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
3．不必寫標(biāo)題．
【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
內(nèi)容完整，語音規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)．
參考詞匯：肥胖   obesity
The passage informs teenagers of the necessity to choose healthy and moderate snacks，which is beneficial to their health，as well as some ways to make healthy snacks part of their daily life．（高分句型一）
As we know，some snacks are high in fat or sugar．Taking too much fat can result in obesity．To much fat in a human body is likely to cause various diseases，including high blood pressure，high blood sugar and heart disease．（高分句型二）Worse still，teenagers who are troubled by weight problems may also lack confidence in communicating with others，which can result in psychological problems．（高分句型三）Thus，I suggest that those who are crazy aboutsnacks should eat snacks when it is necessary．For example，when they feel hungry after taking exercise，they can have some healthysnacks，such as fresh fruit and yogurt．These foods can add the calories or nutrients they need and are low in fat．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于讀寫任務(wù)作文，根據(jù)提示信息簡(jiǎn)述攝取過多脂肪和熱量的負(fù)面影響及對(duì)"零食控"的建議，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，2、要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照一定的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：is beneficial to對(duì)…有益；as well as 除…之外，也；As we know眾所周知；Worse still更糟的是；result in導(dǎo)致
The passage informs teenagers of the necessity to choose healthy and moderate snacks，which is beneficial to their health，as well as some ways to make healthy snacks part of their daily life．（高分句型一）
To much fat in a human body is likely to cause various diseases，including high blood pressure，high blood sugar and heart disease．（高分句型二）
Worse still，teenagers who are troubled by weight problems may also lack confidence in communicating with others，which can result in psychological problems．（高分句型三）

解答 The passage informs teenagers of the necessity to choose healthy and moderate snacks，which is beneficial to their health，as well as some ways to make healthy snacks part of their daily life．（高分句型一）
      As we know，some snacks are high in fat or sugar．Taking too much fat can result in obesity．To much fat in a human body is likely to cause various diseases，including high blood pressure，high blood sugar and heart disease．（高分句型二）Worse still，teenagers who are troubled by weight problems may also lack confidence in communicating with others，which can result in psychological problems．（高分句型三）Thus，I suggest that those who are crazy about snacks should eat snacks when it is necessary．For example，when they feel hungry after taking exercise，they can have some healthy snacks，such as fresh fruit and yogurt．These foods can add the calories or nutrients they need and are low in fat．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．