Question

【題目】假如你叫李華，你校于4月27日組織了一次校園合唱節(jié)活動(dòng)。請你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，給你的美國筆友Jack寫一封電子郵件，告訴他此次活動(dòng)的有關(guān)情況。

1.活動(dòng)的目的； 2.活動(dòng)的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)和方式； 3.你對本次活動(dòng)的感悟

參考詞匯:校園合唱節(jié)Campus Choral Festival

Dear Jack,

I am Li Hua, ...

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Sincerely Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Jack,

How are you doing recently? I miss you very much. Now I’m so excited that I can’t wait to share with you an unforgettable experience.

Last Friday, our school held a Campus Choral Festival, aimed to offer students a chance to show their talent for singing. It lasted 3 days and 18 classes participated in this competition. As was required, each class chose 2 songs to prepare and performed on the stage of our school concert hall. All the students were happy to seize this opportunity torehearse. With the help of teachers, wesang very well and ranked 5th among all the participating classes, which was received with much applause.

I am very happy that our efforts have paid off.The festival benefits us a lot. Not only does it help us share the spirit of teamwork and give us relaxation from heavy schoolwork, it has alsopromoted the friendship among us. What a wonderful time!

Sincerely Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：本次作文要求給你的美國筆友Jack寫一封電子郵件，告訴他你校于4月27日組織了一次校園合唱節(jié)活動(dòng)的具體細(xì)節(jié)。1.活動(dòng)的目的； 2.活動(dòng)的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)和方式； 3.你對本次活動(dòng)的感悟。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要富有變化。要注意書寫，認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況等。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：本篇條理清楚，要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。其句式上的變化既使得文章生動(dòng)而流暢，也體現(xiàn)了作者駕馭句式的能力。例如：文章運(yùn)用了定語從句which was received with much applause.和倒裝句Not only does it help us share the spirit of teamwork and give us relaxation from heavy schoolwork,以及感嘆句What a wonderful time!等。