Question

【題目】假如你是李華，你的美國筆友Peter得知你最近正在準(zhǔn)備高考，特來信鼓勵你，并詢問高考以后同學(xué)們對即將到來的假期的安排。請你給他寫封回信。

注意：1、詞數(shù)：100詞左右；

2、可以適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容，以使行文連貫；

3、回信的開頭與結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Peter,

How is everything with you?

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】I’m Li Hua,

On behalf of the students, I’d like to express our heartfelt gratitude for receiving your letter to encourage us to take part in the upcoming Chinese High Kao.

To express my sincere thanks, I’m writing to make some response to you about our arrangements for the coming holiday. Firstly, it is scheduled to study hard continuously to start our holiday so that we can make better preparations and promote our study in advance. Moreover, I would like to do a lot of specific activities throughout the day, because the enough and proper physical exercises can help us build our body and make us keep health. Lastly, our other students will arrange them to play basketball, if possible some will go for a football match by themselves. If possible, they hope to go and travel for a while and take other activities such as visiting museums, which will offer us more opportunities for cultural and historical knowledge.

Thanks again for your kind letter. It would be highly appreciated if you could response about your cultural knowledge as early as possible at your convenience. Looking forward to your early reply.

【解析】

這是一封感謝信的應(yīng)用文。本文對友好學(xué)校的朋友詢問有關(guān)假期安排的情況進行回復(fù)并詢問相關(guān)事項。

第一步：審題

體裁：應(yīng)用文

時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般將來時。

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

要求：1.對收到來信表達感謝。

2.介紹相關(guān)情況。介紹相關(guān)的假期安排情況。

1）介紹假期開始的時間和以什么事情為假期開始的活動（what date, is scheduled to start）增補內(nèi)容：（提前做好準(zhǔn)備，搞好每一天的學(xué)習(xí)提高成績。Make better preparations and promote our study in advance.）

2）每天的活動安排。（specific activities）增補內(nèi)容：（每天做適量的運動以保持身體健康。Do proper exercises to keep us health.）

3) 其他學(xué)生的安排。（arrangements for others）增補內(nèi)容：（如果可能，去旅游，參加一些體育活動比如打籃球、踢足球等。if possible; travel for a while, take part in some physical exercises such as playing basketball and football.）

4) 再次表達感謝。（thanks for your letter again.）

第二步:列提綱 （重點詞組及句型）

is scheduled to; make better preparations; promote our study; in advance; the specific activities; do proper exercises to keep us health; during the day; arrangements for others; if possible; travel for a while; take part in; some physical exercises; such as; playing basketball and football; thanks for your letter again/ it would be highly appreciated that receive your letter again; look forward to

第三步：連詞成句

I’m Li Hua,

On behalf of the students, I’d like to express our heartfelt gratitude for receiving your letter to encourage us to take part in the upcoming Chinese High Kao.

To express my sincere thanks, I’m writing to make some response to you about our arrangements for the coming holiday.

Firstly, it is scheduled to study hard continuously to start our holiday so that we can make better preparations and promote our study in advance.

Moreover, I would like to do a lot of specific activities throughout the day, because the enough and proper physical exercises can help us build our body and make us keep health.

Lastly, our other students will arrange them to play basketball, if possible some will go for a football match by themselves.

If possible, they hope to go and travel for a while and take other activities such as visiting museums, which will offer us more opportunities for cultural and historical knowledge.

Thanks again for your kind letter.

It would be highly appreciated if you could response about your cultural knowledge as early as possible at your convenience.

Looking forward to your early reply.

根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列補充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (從句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，

第五步：潤色修改

文章思路清晰，語言規(guī)范，段落整齊，語篇連貫，層次清晰。使用了較為高級的句式: so that 引導(dǎo)的目的狀語從句Firstly, it is scheduled to study hard continuously to start our holiday so that we can make better preparations and promote our study in advance. because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從局Moreover, I would like to do a lot of specific activities throughout the day, because the enough and proper physical exercises can help us build our body and make us keep health. which 引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句If possible, they hope to go and travel for a while and take other activities such as visiting museums, which will offer us more opportunities for cultural and historical knowledge.

高級句式的應(yīng)用提升了寫作的檔次，整個短文顯示出了作者高水平的英語表達能力。