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11．請(qǐng)你以一則公益廣告--Don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones為題寫一篇發(fā)言稿，談?wù)劸W(wǎng)絡(luò)給我們帶來(lái)的好處，并呼吁人們放下手中的鼠標(biāo)，與家人多多溝通，享受與家人在一起的美好時(shí)光．
參考詞匯：網(wǎng)民-netizen
注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
          2．題目與開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
          3．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
          4．短文中不能出現(xiàn)與本人相關(guān)的信息．
Don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved onesHello everyone！
Today the number of the netizens in our country has increased rapidly，yet many of them do not pay enough attention to the family．There's no doubt that we benefit much from the Internet．For example，it's convenient for us to get the information we need and communicate with our friends and relatives．Meanwhile，it can help us learn what is happening both at home and abroad．However，no matter how attractive the Internet is，we shouldn't be separated from our loved ones．Therefore，just for a moment，we should stop surfing the Internet and spend time with our families，enjoying the time when we are together．So just remember this：don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones．
Please take action!That's all．Thank you!．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇發(fā)言稿．根據(jù)題目要求可知用第一人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．內(nèi)容包括：一網(wǎng)民沉迷于網(wǎng)絡(luò)而忽視家人的現(xiàn)狀；二網(wǎng)絡(luò)給我們帶來(lái)的好處和導(dǎo)致的問(wèn)題；三并呼吁人們放下手中的鼠標(biāo)，與家人多多溝通，享受與家人在一起的美好時(shí)光；四再次呼吁人們立刻行動(dòng)．高分句型：1．There's no doubt that we benefit much from the Internet．這個(gè)句子用了固定句式There's no doubt that表示"某事是毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)的"；benefit  from是固定短語(yǔ)，表示"從某事里獲益"．毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)我們從網(wǎng)絡(luò)中獲得很多好處．
2．However，no matter how attractive the Internet is，we shouldn't be separated from our loved ones．句子里no matter how引導(dǎo)讓步狀語(yǔ)從句，表示"無(wú)論多么"； separate from表示"和…分開(kāi)"．但是，無(wú)論網(wǎng)絡(luò)多么具有吸引力，我們都不能和我們所愛(ài)的人有隔閡．

解答 One possible version：
                                                                                   Don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones
     Hello，everyone!Today the number of the netizens in our country has increased rapidly，yet many of them do not pay enough attention to the family．（網(wǎng)民沉迷于網(wǎng)絡(luò)而忽視家人的現(xiàn)狀）There's no doubt that we benefit much from the Internet．【高分句型一】For example，it's convenient for us to get the information we need and communicate with our friends and relatives．Meanwhile，it can help us learn what is happening both at home and abroad．However，no matter how attractive the Internet is，we shouldn't be separated from our loved ones．【高分句型二】（網(wǎng)絡(luò)給我們帶來(lái)的好處和導(dǎo)致的問(wèn)題）Therefore，just for a moment，we should stop surfing the Internet and spend time with our families，enjoying the time when we are together．So just remember this：don't let the keyboard separate you and your loved ones．（并呼吁人們放下手中的鼠標(biāo)，與家人多多溝通，享受與家人在一起的美好時(shí)光）
    Please take action!That's all．Thank you!（再次呼吁人們立刻行動(dòng)）

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