Question

【題目】雖然人們不停的說(shuō)給孩子減負(fù) ，但是大部分學(xué)生的學(xué)習(xí)壓力仍然很大， 有些青少年尤其是高三的學(xué)生出現(xiàn)了心理問(wèn)題， 焦慮，不愿意與人交往等。就這種現(xiàn)象，你們班要舉行一次班會(huì)，作為班長(zhǎng)，寫(xiě)一篇發(fā)言稿。內(nèi)容包括：

1. 健康的心理很重要。

2.. 給同學(xué)提些建議：如了解自己， 樹(shù)立信心；與人相處；熱愛(ài)生活

注意：1. 字?jǐn)?shù)不少于 100 字 。

2. 適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫。

Dear classmates,

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear classmates,

Mental health is something that decides whether we can live a happy life or not. However, mental health is easy to be overlooked, which can result in serious mental diseases. Here is some advice on keeping mental health.

First, know your own potential and accept yourself. Instead of having impractical and high expectations and demands for yourself, you should make practical goals for your life.

Second, be sociable and make as many friends as possible. Try to be a person easy to get along with. When you are discouraged, you can share your trouble with your friends, whose comfort and help can greatly relieve your sufferings and help you out.

Third, love your life and work. Try to display your talent in your work and you can get pleasure and satisfaction from your achievements, which can help you keep a good mood.

That is my idea. Thank you for listening.

【解析】

本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文，要求考生寫(xiě)一篇發(fā)言稿，針對(duì)學(xué)生由于壓力過(guò)大而出現(xiàn)心理問(wèn)題這一現(xiàn)象提出一些建議。

第一步：審題

體裁：應(yīng)用文

時(shí)態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

要求：1.健康的心理很重要。

2. 給同學(xué)提些建議：如了解自己，樹(shù)立信心；與人相處；熱愛(ài)生活

第二步：列提綱 （重點(diǎn)詞組）

live a happy life or not; mental health; be easy to do; overlook; result in; disease; some advice on doing; potential; Instead of doing; impractical; expectation; make practical goals for; sociable; as many as possible; get along with; discourage; share...with...; relieve sufferings; display; pleasure; achievement; keep a good mood .

第三步：連詞成句

Mental health is something that decides whether we can live a happy life or not.

However, mental health is easy to be overlooked, which can result in serious mental diseases.

First, know your own potential and accept yourself.

Instead of having impractical and high expectations and demands for yourself, you should make practical goals for your life.

Second, be sociable and make as many friends as possible.

When you are discouraged, you can share your trouble with your friends, whose comfort and help can greatly relieve your sufferings and help you out.

Try to display your talent in your work and you can get pleasure and satisfaction from your achievements, which can help you keep a good mood.

根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題。

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second…, And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對(duì)比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(從句), In spite of+n./doing, On the one hand…, On the other hand… Some…, while others…, as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過(guò)渡，書(shū)寫(xiě)一定要規(guī)范清晰。

第五步：潤(rùn)色修改