Question

【題目】假如你已在新南威爾士大學留學一年多，現(xiàn)在寫一篇五句話作文描述這一年多以來在悉尼的生活。

開頭已寫好。不計入總句數(shù)。

【寫作內(nèi)容】

吃	上課期間：擁擠的學生餐廳；周末：中餐館
住	開始：寄宿家庭，有些規(guī)則讓人不舒服；后來：學生宿舍，更多自由
學	學術要求與國內(nèi)不同；自己的觀點很重要； 比高三更努力；從缺乏自信到自主學習
玩	周末和朋友（多數(shù)為中國學生）外出，欣賞風景，拍照

【寫作要求】

1. 只能使用5個句子表達全部內(nèi)容；

2. 適當添加細節(jié)以使文章連貫。

3. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。

【評分標準】

句子結構準確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結構連貫。

After learning at The University of New South Wales for more than one year，I would like to describe my life in Sydney as “work hard, play hard”.

Answer 1

【答案】

After learning at The University of New South Wales for more than one year，I would like to describe my life in Sydney as “work hard, play hard”.

I first lived in a host family, but (as I was) uncomfortable with some of the rules set down by the host family, I have moved to student accommodation, where I enjoy more freedom. The academic requirements are quite different from those at home and the most important thing is that you must have your own opinion whether (you are) in class or (you are) writing an essay. At first I lacked confidence, but I worked even harder than when I was in Senior 3 and now I'm beginning to get the idea and becoming a more autonomous learner. On weekdays, when we have classes, I eat in the student cafeteria，which is always crowded. I like to go out on weekends with my friends, most of whom are Chinese students, enjoying the beautiful scenery, taking pictures and eating in Chinese restaurants.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇記敘文，要求寫一篇文章來講述自己的留學生活。要注意以下幾點：1、首先要認真審題，題目要求主要有三方面：吃、住、學、玩，都在表格里仔細的列了出來，注意詳略安排。2、以所給的要求為基礎，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來。3、同時使文章應具有一定的連貫性，注意認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等。

【亮點說明】文章主次分明，詳略得當，語言十分準確、簡潔，包含了所有的要點，寫出了自己留學生活的情況。運用了多種不同的詞匯和短語，如a host family寄宿家庭，set down制定，At first一開始，lacked confidence缺乏信心，a more autonomous learner一個自主學習的學生等。且句式多變，如you must have your own opinion whether (you are) in class or (you are) writing an essay.運用了whether...or..的句式， I like to go out on weekends with my friends, most of whom are Chinese students, enjoying the beautiful scenery, taking pictures and eating in Chinese restaurants.中運用了非限制性定語從句，以及非謂語形式，使文章增加了不少亮點。