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假如你叫李華，你校高三同學(xué)正在開(kāi)展一場(chǎng)討論，討論的主題是：高三學(xué)生要不要參加體育鍛煉？請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下信息，給China Daily報(bào)社寫(xiě)一封信，介紹討論的情況并談?wù)勀愕目捶ā?br />注意：1）開(kāi)頭已為你寫(xiě)好     2）字?jǐn)?shù)100-120左右

60%的學(xué)生認(rèn)為	40% 的學(xué)生認(rèn)為
1）應(yīng)該每天進(jìn)行體育鍛煉 2）可以做早操、打籃球等。但時(shí)間不要太長(zhǎng) 3）鍛煉能增強(qiáng)體質(zhì)，減少疾病。	1）鍛煉浪費(fèi)時(shí)間。 2）鍛煉使人疲勞。 3）運(yùn)動(dòng)后很興奮，不能集中精力學(xué)習(xí)。

 
Dear Editor,
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Answer 1

Dear Editor,
I am writing to tell you the discussion we’ve had about whether students of senior three should take physical exercise. 60% of the students think they should take exercise every day, such as doing morning exercises, playing basketball, but it shouldn’t take up too much time. Exercise builds one’s body and reduces diseases. Sports let their brains have a rest so that their revision will be more effective.
While other 40% of the students believe taking exercise is a waste of time and tiring. After having sports, they are much too excited for a long time to pay attention to their lessons. It is also possible to be hurt in sports.
In my opinion, I think taking exercise is good to us, especially to our senior three students, but we shouldn’t spend too much time on the sports.

試題分析：此篇書(shū)面表達(dá)要求寫(xiě)一封信來(lái)介紹班級(jí)討論情況。對(duì)于書(shū)信的格式同學(xué)們都非常熟悉，寫(xiě)作時(shí)只需將要點(diǎn)表達(dá)清楚。但是在介紹要點(diǎn)時(shí)，一定要注意語(yǔ)言的流暢，而且要恰當(dāng)使用連接詞以使語(yǔ)言連貫，上下文銜接自然。在時(shí)態(tài)方面，因?yàn)槭墙榻B不同的觀點(diǎn)，所以可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。此外，在結(jié)構(gòu)安排上可以使用三個(gè)段落來(lái)分別介紹贊成觀點(diǎn)、反對(duì)觀點(diǎn)和自己的觀點(diǎn)，這樣使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文采用三段式結(jié)構(gòu)，開(kāi)篇提出寫(xiě)信的目的，然后兩段分別介紹對(duì)體育鍛煉的兩種不同觀點(diǎn)，這種安排使得文章結(jié)構(gòu)分明，層次清晰。文章在句式方面，既有簡(jiǎn)練的短句，又有涵蓋內(nèi)容豐富的長(zhǎng)句，如I am writing to tell you the discussion we’ve had about whether students of senior three should take physical exercise. 這句話(huà)使用了whether引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，還有Sports let their brains have a rest so that their revision will be more effective.這句話(huà)就使用了so that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句，這種長(zhǎng)短句的結(jié)合也顯示了作者對(duì)于語(yǔ)言的把控力。此外文中however、moreover和meanwhile等副詞也有效地起到連接上下文的作用，使文章內(nèi)容連貫，銜接自然。